Wow, just wow. It should be that and not the, but besides this minor correction, your poem is overall pure and utter crap.

Hey i tried to send a message to ya, but it didnt work do u have a new email

You are definitely different. Are you seriously retarded? I hope you are only 7 and practicing how to never write in the future.

nice

hey and i thought everyone was special in their own way

Why are you commenting on your own poems?

Shi....... period. not even worth a vote.

well i think you just got caught writing a dumb poem, im not trying to be mean i just dont like it and i think if you try harder you could turn this concept into somthing good.

Why do habe to go and trash God like that, whad he ever do to you

Now this is an actual poem, while it might not be the best its a good start, i myself am not even that great but the suggestions and comments from this site have showed me how crappy i am and how much further i need to go

I think you smoked some bad granola

My tomahawk goes up, UP and straight into your left temple. As blood starts oozing, I realize that I did the right thing. Murder is justified for crap poetry.

*sniffle* damn thats how i feel! Cause now i know that "poetry" isnt my thing....

See, compared to most people on this site im nice, and u called me an ass

i thought bacchus was dead???

oh, my. whatever could be wrong with that!!!

Wtf?

DID YOU USE BULBOUS ROOT VEGETABLES????!!!!????

this isnt even a poem, its like your telling your friends at school what you did friday night.

Yeah.