4 7 6 nice thought, though.

oh wow

lovely 9

something besides "it" please. The pronoun makes the whole poem inprecise and less poetic.

"a" rather than "his" perhaps?

the fork is a cliche'. try soemthing else (but not a spoon) the rest is all right.

that would hurt.

your writing has evolved to high standard, be proud dan

4 7 4 I see a pattern here - thematically and form wise. I'm also curious as to how so many of yours keep coming up--it would explain how your numbers got so high.

I'm confused. thank you. confusion can be good sometimes.

First haiku- 8.5 second - 4.5 average- 6.

the first 4 stanzas grab me. you need a 5th to complete the structure here: take my hands (or skin, although touch is usually associated immediately with hands) ... also, i respectfully suggest that your eyes have *not* failed you--they have taken it all in, and more. maybe your legs failed you--bringing you to where you could partake in these visions? maybe your legs failed you by not bearing you away? your final stanza is weakest. if you'd like some suggestions for reworking the last, i'll gladly send them along. z

that's it? a little ritual scarring, and you just walk away? WTF?

i thought you pitched a tent 'most every day?

mad as a hatter

nice

hahaha

made me think of happy times and booking a holiday 7

5 5 4 what gives?

just go to sleep