Robert K Foster
on Dolly was a damn fine lamb by <{Baba^Yaga}>
7 Mar 2003, 7:51 AM
I think she looks good for her age.
(actuially i like this poem)
this really dosn't say anything.
could be stronger and more precise...
OK
it would be-HOOVE mr foster to familiarize himself with your oeuvre, as posted on this site (see: plains of africa) as well as the 3rd deinition of the poet's perk:
coin * age n.
1. The right or process of making coins.
2. - Metal currency.
- A system of metal currency.
3.
- A new word or phrase.
- The invention of new words.
know? you mean "no", i am certain.
hrmmmm... syllables, OK... content - iffy, not very funny, really kind of mediocre.
He was the most listless 'bottom' ever. Almost like fucking a pile of dry sand, but what the hell sublets need love too.
Dry semen, i feel, works much better then name dropping, or cornholing deities that simply just do not play a role any longer in our well being. God does not talk. No-doz? don't punk out, just take the real thing.
your imagery here, though fastly sought out i'm sure through hours of sleepless research. was like eating a mouthful of jelly beans, with meatloaf, and champagne while listening to Gobi desert sound bites on lsd and then sand papering ones elbows. Great job. 7.
Bivalve, or bituminous coal would have served your ability better, here, that is. Not on the planet.
BLACK POWER!
how kindergarten like. I bet kids would love this--nice rhythm and simplicity... bad title, though.
Hoving?
No entry found for hoving.
4 suggestions found:
loving
moving
roving
homing
shoving?
you've masked the meaning too much, i think.
martinis?
parhaps you've had a few because your meaning is muddled and now i'm befuddled.
I didn't read it--but it is not a haiku.
much shorter than the original book. They could've saved a lot of paper.
different.
almost there. still a little young.
not as good as it could be. this format may be too limiting to what you are trying to say.
funny and completely worthless at the same time.