some deleted user
on Love by Enki
4 Mar 2003, 3:18 PM
lol
The laws of the universe states that to be quite normal Mr. Jones.
That's funny i just read this out loud replacing the word "write" with rock, and i pissed myself splendid. no shit, i swear.
"Protray something deep." YESM ME TOO.LOL.YAAFR.
try replacing the word "write" for rock.
That made no sense. You want him to not forget you, but you want to forget him, am i to understand this correctly? better then your other one though, how the guitar or the biting air fits in one could only dare to guess if that process wasn't absolutely indistinguishable from not really giving a loaf (a nice way of saying sh_t!) i'm toning it down these days we wouldn't want anyone to accidentilly stab their ass out or say just kill themselves. God forbid jim jones could talk 800 stupid americans into killing themselves for no reason. Perhaps that's why american poetry sucks.
American poetry sucks.
lol i think this poem is worse then the one that i previously read...the same one you so coldly judged. eh. what goes around comes around!
Cheese and garlic are for the intelligent. Jesus would say maybe he smells bad to your nose but if you bear it he might smell good to your ears if you listen he might have something to teach you, and by the way, i also prefer cheese to cookies any day, but i did think this a good poem so 7.
i know how you feel. in fact, i think i wrote the same poem in my head at one point...
Sadly, I may be breaking my dis-ease.
I get conflicting feelings as to wether this was a peacful enjoyable "education" or a teen rape. sorry. clarify? whv.
Very insightful. Keep writing, I'd love to see more of your work.
Brilliant. 10
lol this is gold because it's so true...i have the same stupid shit scrawled on my books as well! :) thanks for this!
and this doesn't suck...how? i'll stick to the "shitty" american poetry
i want to thank you, mysterious one, for your comment on my entry...your poetic talents far surpass mine! this poem paints an even clearer picture itself...but i eagerly welcome you to analyze my poetry whenever you'd like! take care.
Your poem successfully paints a Piccasso-type image of a distorted self through your disordered listings and implications of human features (ie the mind, heart and eyes). Was this purposeful? I also liked how the substance around which this poem is based changed from madness to wine, to blood (or atleast it's implied) and finally to tears- indicating that sometimes tears show more pain than blood (emotion hurts more than anything physical). The formation of word over word creates a smooth flow to your work, also symbolic of the flow of liquid I presume. I could analyze your poetry for hours! It gives me so much insight to your personality! From this, I gather that you percieve your intelligence to be your initial strong-point, your heart is where your pain is felt, and your eyes are the main expressors of your emotion. Extremely well done!
Interesting . . .
Nice, I'd like to read more of your writing.
So much better than: DJ Hock a loogie.