brazen
on Despair by Caducus
5 Feb 2003, 3:09 PM
i am almost convinced that PAKI invented teen14 to praise this poem after saying no one over 16 would....hmm. mystery.
Not as good as Harry Potter but still worthy of a nine! Keep it up!
I quite like this...it's not so depressing, but yeah, it's cool. I don't think that you'll get a good vote from poetandknowit, somehow.
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Ranger
on The Marble Jar & the new boy, Primrose Avenue, Yesteryear. by ==Doylum
5 Feb 2003, 12:19 PM
Cool, ish, kind of, 9
Shhh... lest they learn too much, and bring things across which should not be spoken of.
Yep, I like it.
Yes, as with the others I love this...the repetition of 'This night' made it feel to me as though it were being sung. I saw one of your other recent poems before I logged in which had rhyme, I've not seen your rhyming skills before, I'd better check it out.
Another nine for you, ma'am.
By the way, would it be impertinant of me to ask you to check out my latest works and tell me what you think? Especially the latest one. No-one's really told me if it's any good or not. Ta.
I've not laughed this much for ages. You may have a nine, no wait, this is the best parody yet and it's not a haiku, here's a laughter filled ten!
Whoaaaa, weird at first...I think in my confusion I'll give an 8
When you enter the vineyard of your neighbor you may eat grapes as you please to your satisfaction, but you must not take away any in a container. Deuteronomy 23:24
By the way, this is my 2000th comment guys! Party at my place!!!!1
how many times can someone say "beautiful". seriously, your testing my limits...
Sometimes i laugh at myself, some times i don't I.... (thwumpe) <Baba is knocked off of the podium and into the shadows by what appears to be a head of kale? from where? It has a Nasa stamp on it? NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! YOU FOOLS! NOT THE KALE TOO!>
Ooh yeah, I like this, even if I don't understand it. The words 'Under Will' seem to make sense; but, not sure how 'love' figures in the poem.
but still feels incomplete. what is your bond? (i mean, i know it's love, but i want more from this.)
Brava... that's rather magnificent. The third stanza seems a bit weak, howe'er.
Nice.
A children's scream should be either a child's scream or children's scream...other than that, yeah.
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Wonderful, this rocks.
Nice proverb aside from the syllables.
Do you listen to Black Sabbath, Athena?
"In the daylight/runs darkness/on the verge of night a fear is born/sweeter than the dream" etc. Good song
Beef and broccoli with oyster sauce. choice!