"it helps YEE if you're queer" showoff. barely. I did care for chutney flicking sidekicks, but i was over that qite quickle-ry. care for a quickle?

COME JOIN THE DARKSIDE. MASTER THE CHIRPE...IT IS TIME TO UNIT OUR CHIRPES TOGETHER AND FELL THE TYRANNY OF THE CHARP...WHO'S WEITH ME CHIRPES UNITE!

Hmmm...I really don't think this is the right time for the sentiment expressed in your poem.

your a pro 9

Fun

Juvenile and just kinda stupid. The repeat of "get your" makes it look like you just couldn't think of two other syllables worth of something to say and on a haiku, that's saying something.

my bro said it all

where for art thou 'mollusc king'? will there be more of that?

an epic as usual but the 1st one of yours I took time to read and t'was worth the scrolling

apply your mask each day to mimic every face in the sea all you are is a pattern carved out of your own misery **best thing i read all day

I could really understand where you were coming from with this, its very good I like the point it makes about us all being 'fabric cyborgs' on the road to success with a free stopover at a town called failure. We do immerse ourselves in the plasma screens of misery and repetitiveness. This is groundhog day of pain, a head on collision resulting from death on the international highway on the road to hell, a million and one things can be said, sad very sad state of existence and you said it very well -10-

nice poem but couldn't link what the title had to do with any of it.

Aside from the massacre of the word phoenix, the syllable count is wrong. Still not bad. How about: "when man uses flame to kill a phoenix, he makes his own enemy" or "a new enemy" Either way. Unless you don't care that it's not a Haiku, in which case, it's cool.

Sometimes the stream of consciousness is polluted and all the fishies wash up on the shore.

Bunny, if you don't want your tripe ranked, don't post it on pomRANKER. got it? Good. If you want to emote, do so, by all means, but if you put it up on a site that critiques writing, you'd better write it well, or someone will call you on it. I focused on the gaping technical flaws in this glob of grief-masturbation because I was trying to maintain some respect for the dead. You can't write for shit, that's all there is to it. I don't adhere too much to the dictionary, but I don't think it's kryptonite either. There's nothing wrong with you that education and maybe ECT wouldn't fix. Your feelings can be used productively, just learn to put them down better. There's nothing wrong with that. There's no need to take it as a personal attack. You don't need to make any toward me either.I did read the Bardo Thodol for your uncle, though. I hope it helped. I am sorry about your loss. P.S.As far as the 'thru' thing goes, a bunch of morons who can't spell doesn't make a non-word valid. Hugs 'n' kisses!

I think the author's name is appropriate. Not in very good taste.

time and effort...also seems to have successfully brought out all the stars. good job moon.

my ass hurts from reading all these comments...thank god i don't have a life.

that's funny. everytime you re-edit this some one comes along and goes 0. so 0! chiRPE! i have chirps in my sole, yes a need to chirpe from deep withyne.?

I imagined Olivier reading this with a skull in his hand, not a bad effort