thepinkbunnyofdoom
on some deleted poem
4 Feb 2003, 3:35 PM
Simply Divine
aww...
CHIRPE!
how sad :(
idea... make the poemranker pointer selection hand a middle finger, but only for those with poemwanker awards and me and da.
not bad
a lonely man with what appears to be nacho cheese hanging from his beard and yamuca? is kind of clapping from the second tier upper left... can you see him. he liked it... he thinks you have talent... his name is chip, he went to art school too. i think he fancies you? he's consistantly the only one that comes to your shows... save me of course, but that's just how i show you my inner feelings and sole. hug me. 10!
GOLDEN Q -TIP AWARDE INRETROSPECTIVE IRRELEVENCE AND FUNGUS CONTROL... ON THIS FINE DAY IN CHIRTLE DIRP WURP WURP..<brought to you by 'stridox' howe to make ox shit work for your face and 'Lemming' what the fuck? why not jump?>
Why sir, do you make me need a shower. bye. now i must vaccuum. everything. again. AGAIN! you know what i've fond? the process of compulsive cleaning helps my sole cope with time and kale and being a secret agent. It's wholesome good clean fun. whoops gotta to go... the dryer just chirped.
i didn't even realize that these were all seperate haikus...i should really start paying attention to...eh, huh?
I'll will have you refer to my pinata as the lonedisco29andahalf. Thankthee... to correct thyself lest we be forced to empty scabbarde and DANCE THE GAYE BLADE! urp.
Is a radioactive smurf forced underwater a snork?
Chuckey cheese, where a kid can be a kid.
most notable correction i have to make is to change 'coal' to 'lead', for i'm sure it was a reference to the alchemy in the stanza before it, and alchemy was originally the science of changing lead to gold. i'll leave any other errors to the ranking public
lrig a mi eehet ekil
like tehee i'm a girl...sadly though, no stereotypical valley girl in middle school or high school EVER seemed to figure it out. what good is genius if no one understands it?
"I can see the problems shining in the flaring 'helmet' lamps" fool.
the cuban heel gladly earns you many chained ten year olds though. enjoy.
9.
I draw a bead from up high in my cliff side perch. The sun is sweltering and blasting my eyes cruel like. a little closer..damnit, as sweat is stinging my sore chapped lips... just a bit *crack* cha chink ba chink ker *ack*.
a confused horse with an empty saddle and a wilting and tumbling head of kale are all that's sadly left. my work is done here. i put my new 30 od self re-chirping kale gun with cell phone coimpatibility back in it'd photosynthetic recharger, mount my palfrey and depart into the crimson and burnt umber dipping orb(the sun) whilst whistling a sullen ballad nonetheless in G chirpe. another day, another bounty, and i'm none the wiser....dewwy ewewy ewe dew ewe ew. dew dew dewey dew dew dew dewey dew. that's just the big chirpe on my shoulders talking there people coupled by the experience of my clovered hooves.
First of all razongrin you should think about going on American Idol; you'd probably dethrone Simon Cowell. As for chicka_babe05 and Feeling, no offense but as Robert Frost once said, "Poetry that doesn't rhyme is like playing tennis without a net." And so you know, your net is barely holding, if at all. My guess is this poem is for someone you like, hopefully male. So I understand that it has to be romantic and all, but don't rhyme words with the same words, and don't use 7 yous or variations of you in a 10 line poem. Poems like these make the listener or reader dumber than he/she already is. The sentimentality is there; but nothing else is there. Try to make it better, put more effort into it. And if you still can't come up with anything better than this, there's always stilling a poem online. Try lovepoems.com. I'm very helpful ain't I? (that's sarcastic in case you couldn't figure it out)-2- sympathy vote. At least you made some attempt and have the sentimentality part down
ok, "?"
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
4 Feb 2003, 3:14 PM
like always its great