Makes a good poening to a story but not much of a poem by itself. It needs more. I'll vote when you add to it.

looking good, can we look forward to a poem on the Moral Philosophy section any time soon?

'pizzicato slurs...' Damnright brilliant. Slurred pizzicati... DAMN but that's a great image.

That's really quite gorgeous. Or maybe it's jsut that I'm a sucker for that sort of story. Saying that something isn't a poem because it's a story is ridiculous -- among other things, it means that the Divine Comedy isn't poetry. And you use archaic words, which is also good. Full cheers, dammit.

Much better than your other two. -9-

Sad. Just Sad. Hope this cheers you up. -10-

Ahahahahahahahahahahaha. Wait nope Ahahahahahahahahahahahaha still funny.

I believe I'd rather read a hundred mind numbingly cliche poems about love than one peice of prose presented as a poem. Before you start defining what diffferent styles of poems are perhaps you should learn what a poem is in the general sense.

Which throne are you trying to heir to? or is it air or err?

Mwahahahahahaha. I know I've read this before, but I can't believe I didn't vote on it. Cheers!

Hmmm. I never thought I'd end up using this comment on someone, but it seems to be trying too hard. Lovely, though.

Wait smoke wants darkness to end? Smoke causes Darkness. Other than that i like it -7-

Hehehehe Thats twice in one day you made me laugh. -8-

How sad.

Roach motel.

Moses was in Egypt. lol Just kidding. I like it.

I never get people who go to a site just to complain that they don't like it. I'm thinking that if you don't like something you should avoid it.

Has a lot of potential, mr intransit. Keep going, though, I agree with the above comment, it does need a bit more.

yay, funny

I actually liked the story told from the speaker/rapist's view, but as I've noticed you do in other poems, you sacrificed rhythm for rhyme and that puts unnatural stops in the poem.