Caducus
on some deleted poem
1 Feb 2003, 4:53 AM
Beautiful, you always notice the small things we miss in our lives and explain them so exquisitely, a shame you hardly ever comment on anyones work I know I for one would appreciate your input. *10*
geller is a pervert he is as bent as his spoons.
blurryphotograph
on haiku's i love but i cannot do them well enough by UAFANTHORPEY
1 Feb 2003, 6:21 AM
haha i love you.
some deleted user
on Cant sleep, clown will eat me.(A poem about clowns) by lunar
1 Feb 2003, 2:12 PM
LOL
Great poeme, Teen14! I especially like your rhymings of "try" with "die", "friend" with "end", and "black" with... "hat". Keep up the good work! 10!!!!!!!!!
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
1 Feb 2003, 8:22 AM
lol
Nice poem!
Wowee wow! Fun fun fun!
Is it only a third of Americans that believe that?
Lovely. Spring rolls as well (I'm shamelessly self-promoting).
This is by far your best work!!!
thepinkbunnyofdoom
on Cant sleep, clown will eat me.(A poem about clowns) by lunar
1 Feb 2003, 1:20 PM
This is Great. Almost funnier than the T-Shirt.
Ending needs reworked but i really liked the "stomach punched hangover"
Uh??? I've read this Over and over again and it just doesn't make much sense to me. -3-
This seems like a longer version of life. Which wouldn't be so bad but It feels like your just saying the same things over and over again. -5- Try making this shorter or life longer.
My mate has a boa constrictor and keeps frozen rodents for his treats, this was one shaken martini --------------> 7
pretty much agree with JC some nice imgery here, think the 1st 3 lines of the last stanza needs a re-edit, it kind of goes a bit off there but a good read
last 5 lines left me cold, up to that point i thought it was enchanted and descriptive, i know your a fan of imagery in poetry and you almost had it here. I dont always have time to do re-writes maybe your the same but the end of this poem needs more thought provoking lines.=====>7
Reality is insanity it kills your belief in dreams, take a picture spill your wine, drown yourself in alkaline.
that was my thought whilst reading this and dont ask me why.
reactions are interesting when you read certain poems, this is good in my humble opinion however i do fear votes/comments will be split on this -8
you are mad...but funny too -7