haha cute

Some people are just so heartless....

and don't forget writer of triangle poems!!!

* Opening

By far, love, this is the best work I have seen from you. Excellent, aalf mabrook, you really have broken throught with this and it is especially refreshing to see the lack of rhyme. And youre imagery is incredible, truly.

good as always

I was hoping for something a bit more intelligent, but then againn this is poemranker not Yale. Stipend anyone?

the last line feels jilted of a few beats. other than that--much, much nicer. still sways sing-songily, but is much cleaner.

but you write of love, and you love Tien so does that make you a hipporite? life isnt a game its a very cruel joke

i really like this poem. the first three lines are my favorite. good job>8

Blade is just a mindless brit popper. He is trying to be stupid so remove him. But add Range and put Cadacus back on there!!!!! And DA for his abundance of ass pimples!!! And God's Wife for that Raven poem!!

This is good but could be better by tightening and deleting words that add no value to the poem. And the rhyme sounds a bit forced in spots. Still, a nice lyric.

Could be better. Have you read I'm a snob by zero? i think it was zero but the point is you used almost everything he mentions about pimple poems(guilty of that myself). Try reading that then coming back and revising this one. -6-

That gellar part is just outta left field some where and its not like the rest of the poem is tied together very well either so enjoy your zero.

A big zero for taste. In fact I'd give it two if i could.

Zzinnia66 are you inbreed??? Cause this poems great and well you do leave alot of comments that have absolutly nothing to do with either the poem you post to or even the topic of the comments posted.

nice :) >10

You do know that you suck at this right?

Full marks for speed and topicality. Two out of ten for versification. Zero for taste.

talk more of love i like that better. although an 8 for this