god'swife
on Summer by MaliqaTara
2 Feb 2003, 6:25 PM
The only light at the end of any tunnel is a train. Get out of the way. ther is some honest and worthwhile emotion here, you just need to learn how to paint. I think your vision is strong.
Most amazing poem ever, except the last line ruins everything.
The last stanza makes me so tremendously happy. the first, not as much. This is worthy of a more universal title.
Good gracious, and here was i under the impression that i should give a fuck?
Dammit, that title. Argh. That would make such a wonderful stretto. And I can't use it because I'd be stealing it. Erg.
Oh, and tell Limonade I'm sorry about the hamster. Really I am.
poetandknowit
on Hermes Trigamestus (was not a monk edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
2 Feb 2003, 5:31 PM
I think Shardick is your weakest character yet.
This made my lower back tingle. I want you! This instant!
I would rather read 100 well written poems than just one of your lyrics or poems. I find it interesting the narrow mind you have when it comes to poetry. Maybe it is because you are gay.
You sir, are the worst excuse for a pimple poet on this site! Can you really expect anyone over 16 to take you seriously as a writer? Well, minus DA. Do you expect praise from the poets of my stature? I mean, come on. Read this aloud with out laughing and I will buy you a pint!
i love it, how come i had to show u my writing shit, and i never got to see what you write? i don't think its fare :). How long ago did u write all of this?
Does using word varations like temp'ry, mem'ry, 'tis make a poem more poetic?
What about the Silver surfer?
that's it in a nutshell. an appropriate receptacle. 10. rock on.
Explosions rock. Icarian joy and gladness.
"I dont really care what people think about my writing, but if another, I feel, decent poet from this site constructively criticized my work, I might pay attention." Do you know how many people say this yet still post there work here? If you do not care what people think then you would not post a poem. This poem has some exceptionally nice cliches in it. My favorite is "whisper in the dark."
Do you ever send your poems to magazines?
nice addition.
Are hippos omnivorous? I thought they were herbivores, with their wide blunt teeth.
BEST POEM EVER!!!!!
Exccelent, this.