| Re: Prologue by Dovina |
nypoet22 65.10.116.105 |
22-Oct-06/8:53 PM |
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i'd be curious to hear this performed by actors. is it a prologue to something, or to all poetry in general?
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| Re: Epilogue by MacFrantic |
nypoet22 65.10.116.105 |
22-Oct-06/9:09 PM |
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interesting. i'm not sure this stands on its own, but the end of a series... sure, why not.
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| Re: Tidal by helenwales |
nypoet22 65.10.116.105 |
22-Oct-06/9:18 PM |
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not strictly haiku, but an interesting series of images nonetheless. the majority of these verses are closer to senryu (5-7-5 syllabic verse about people) than haiku (5-7-5 syllabic verse about nature). if these all really constitute one overall poem however, i would try to make your theme clearer, because i'm not seeing connection between the montage of images.
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| Re: Israel (Through The Eyes Of One Jewish Soul) by slana5 |
Sing4Jesus! 85.210.219.182 |
23-Oct-06/2:54 AM |
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Very amusing. I assume you are a Zionist. Jesus was killed by you lot.
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| Re: Pope Benedict And The Limbo Problem by Edna Sweetlove |
Sing4Jesus! 85.210.219.182 |
23-Oct-06/2:57 AM |
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The pope is an evil old man and is probably satan-spawn. So mocking him is good in my book!
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| Re: The Day Habeas Corpus Died by Wakeboarder20 |
Sing4Jesus! 85.210.219.182 |
23-Oct-06/2:58 AM |
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Unsubtle to say the least.
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| Re: MRS Degree by Miggy |
Sing4Jesus! 85.210.219.182 |
23-Oct-06/2:59 AM |
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What is an MRS degree? I think we should be told.
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| Re: Tennesee Waterfall by razorgrin |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
23-Oct-06/8:33 AM |
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I've heard it called a Kentucky Falls before; you guys must have some weird water features.
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| Re: The Day Habeas Corpus Died by Wakeboarder20 |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
23-Oct-06/8:37 AM |
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| Re: Danger Zone by Miggy |
drnick 24.176.22.254 |
23-Oct-06/2:51 PM |
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Inspiring with its complexity.
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| Re: Prologue by Dovina |
drnick 24.176.22.254 |
23-Oct-06/2:58 PM |
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| Re: Take that thing off your head by lukehanney |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
23-Oct-06/4:13 PM |
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I do believe that this is about Jade Goody's wedding day...
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| Re: Kill Criminals In The Name Of JESUS! by Sing4Jesus! |
Dovina 70.38.78.229 |
23-Oct-06/4:17 PM |
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I wish you would enter discussion on whether these Jesus poems are satire or if you really like this stuff. If you mean it, then you've progressed about an inch backward from the Crusades.
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| Re: Canada by PodPoet |
Dovina 70.38.78.229 |
23-Oct-06/5:35 PM |
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You may not be from Canada, but I've been to most of these places, and it sounds like you have too. What I miss is some application, something beyond rhyme and reninisce. The last line especially needs something more specific than "all" and "awe."
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| Re: Epilogue by MacFrantic |
Dovina 70.38.78.229 |
23-Oct-06/5:38 PM |
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It could be the end of a great collective work, of which mine is the Prologue, and the middle is all of Poemranker.
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| Re: Slur by MacFrantic |
half.italian 70.36.242.152 |
24-Oct-06/12:41 AM |
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I like it. It reads well. The one thing I would do: change 'devastation' to 'devastated' or something else entirely.
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| Re: Golden Times by cpill |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
24-Oct-06/3:43 AM |
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It is an unbreakable and universal law of poetry that you must always rhyme 'pie-man' with 'Simon', if you are to rhyme 'pie-man' at all.
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| Re: The parameters of speech. by leon lyman |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
24-Oct-06/3:44 AM |
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Excellent. Might want a comma between letter and fencing in line 2.
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| Re: Kill Criminals In The Name Of JESUS! by Sing4Jesus! |
Dan garcia-Black 67.72.98.45 |
24-Oct-06/6:30 AM |
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This is a suicide note, right?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
howl 81.178.72.28 |
24-Oct-06/8:06 AM |
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I understand this is a meditation on how money can buy things that take up more room than the money itself. The language is a bit prosaic. That is my only criticism.
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