Re: Kill Criminals In The Name Of JESUS! by Sing4Jesus!	howl 81.178.72.28	24-Oct-06/8:16 AM
This is good. Apart from the last verse. The last verse is bollocks.
Re: The Day Habeas Corpus Died by Wakeboarder20	howl 81.178.72.28	24-Oct-06/8:23 AM
I don't know why you argue that this poem has any subtlety. It doesn't. On the plus side it isn't too shoddy. I dont like the 'not as good as tv reality' line. I think it would work better if the narrator were watching something specific.
Re: Danger Zone by Miggy	howl 81.178.72.28	24-Oct-06/8:25 AM
Mature version of truth or dare sounds terrible. I much prefer it with a young filly.:(
Re: The Little Mouse That Roared by Wakeboarder20	howl 81.178.72.28	24-Oct-06/8:28 AM
and not afraid to force the issue is so ridiculous it made me Lol.
Re: Prologue by Dovina	howl 81.178.72.28	24-Oct-06/8:30 AM
Cool. Put in on your gravestone.
Re: MRS Degree by Miggy	howl 81.178.72.28	24-Oct-06/8:31 AM
She is the opposit of a tack is terrible :( as is the teachers giving her an A. I'd have given her an F.
Re: Your Eyes by Dovina	howl 81.178.72.28	24-Oct-06/8:34 AM
Good apart from the last line which is a bit of a bum ending.
Re: Crappy by drnick	howl 81.178.72.28	24-Oct-06/8:38 AM
you seem to keep missing the verb to be out all the time. If you see the verb to be as naughty use different verbs.
Re: The Unforgiven II by alvinb	JAM 74.135.123.249	24-Oct-06/9:11 AM
this act of plagiarism has been reported to moderator
Re: # 2 by Lifeboatman	Dovina 12.72.34.18	24-Oct-06/6:09 PM
I don’t pretened to follow this; I suspect that you and your lover are the only ones who do. I do like some of the lines: “Must we to Time's fall fall?” “Yet go gently, never in haste. Deny not what you desire to taste. Then shall glee befall us.” “daffodils” “bouquets”
regarding some deleted poem...	<~> 167.206.181.179	25-Oct-06/12:06 PM
this is a hoot, DGB. i don't think you need the word "ever" in the last line. that takes it a little too far over the top. great imagery.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 62.252.32.15	26-Oct-06/1:21 AM
I'm astonished that nobody's given you the inevitable 'the change will do you good'...
Re: # 2 by Lifeboatman	Ranger 62.252.32.15	26-Oct-06/1:24 AM
This is good in places and not-so-good in others. 'Me, you and Solitude...' is good. 'There never was a king who us did rule; society had branded us fools' is not so good. Have a comb through the grammar, and reverse about 75% of the word order inversions. That's what I'd do, anyway.
Re: Edna's Video Library by Edna Sweetlove	Engelbert Humpalot 194.154.22.35	26-Oct-06/9:57 AM
This is a very piece of work. I congratulate you. 10/10!!!
Re: Flea poem by Sing4Jesus!	Engelbert Humpalot 194.154.22.35	26-Oct-06/9:58 AM
Magnificent!
Re: Kill Criminals In The Name Of JESUS! by Sing4Jesus!	Engelbert Humpalot 194.154.22.35	26-Oct-06/9:59 AM
The last stanza gives me hope for mankind.
regarding some deleted poem...	Zoe 89.241.144.3	26-Oct-06/11:11 AM
IWhat if you replaced teh god names with modern names? That would be unexpected.
Re: Royal Blades by Dovina	Zoe 89.241.144.3	26-Oct-06/11:13 AM
Muscular writing! Not sure about the last line. There's a whole other story there.
Re: The Pit’s Bottom by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.36.126	26-Oct-06/1:02 PM
This piece of doggerel is in response to “Crappy” by Dr. Nick, DND, Doctor of Non-Divinity, Pastor of the Michigan Church of Atheism.
Re: Consider this by MacFrantic	Ranger 62.252.32.15	27-Oct-06/4:33 AM
Now choose...the red pill - or the blue pill...