-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on Hinged by Imperfections
23 Jan 2003, 12:42 PM
I like the way you've used hinges to symbolise your struggle to come to terms with abortion.
Fuck.
Oh, but please change "would of" to "would have". Please.
Oh...I really wanted to be sarcatic and rename it the Ode that never should have been...but it's actually quite funny.
Maybe next time. I'll go and read Blade's work to see real crap. Or not.
My God! This poeme is so beautiful that it doesn't even make any sense! Are you a pro?
My God! MY GOD! What have you done... *weeps*
Durst you bespatter the Good Name of Pirgayte LeChoadk with this tawdry example of post-apocalyptic incontinence!? A pox on thee!
Ahhhh gutted! I didn't look. I kept my eyes shut the whole time. Even when I typed in this comment. I then employed a method of trial and error combined with some intelligent guess-work to click on the 'Submit' button. GUTTED TO THE MAX!
Once I went for a walk in the woods and trod in some dog poo.
Don't make fun of Osama's beard. Jesus had one like that too.
lol nice one you fucking bitch, you think thats funny...na just playing :)
This is the BEST, absolute BEST exploration of human themes I've ever read!!!!
Oh wait... actually it's crap.
I have never seen a more klepto-masturbatory entrepoid. After reading this poeme, I think I've just glimpsed all our hypocracies in one huge neuroplastic ellipse. GREAT WORK!
An enjoyable read (although it was quite difficult to concentrate-must not listen to Crash Test Dummies while reading poetry!).
Yes, anyway-this is good, Mr. poetandknowit. I especially like the last bit of the second stanza very much. It's something slightly different to normal.
Perhaps now that I've acknowledged you're a good writer you'll feel more inclined to give me some help? :)
It would be greatly appreciated.
Regardless, I think I'll give this a nine.
If only someone had told me that before I decided to read this poeme. Or before I ingested that rather unpleasant sclerotic diaper toolkit.
I really love this.
"That image of love will never sleep". Magic
I think I agree with Tintagiles about the Osama's beard bit, however I like the use of angels, also the 'slaughter' maximises the effect of that part (I know I sound vague here, never mind).
If you can find a way to replace the old beard this will be worth a ten on my behalf, till then you may have nine.
Ace use of "choke" to rhyme with "smoke"!
Ha! Ha! A triumph.
5. The way you comb your hair.
6. Your freckled nose.
7. The way you say you care.
8. Your crazy clothes.
Cold makes for good poems, and this one is very good indeed.