GregDeEgg
on Witch to Wicca by Lenore
23 Jan 2003, 4:17 PM
What powerful images. I feel the ritual very plainly. Some questionable lines as far as flow goes, but overall a very powerful piece.
neat-o
This reminds my of a time when i was cleaning out the park's toilet.
Yes. Yes. Yes!
fucking A man, i like it
Very nice. That last line took me aback. I had to re-read it to make sure I read it correctly. Good imaging.
This is really deliteful, a good strong edit. My only small complaint is 'abstinence' they arre so young you couldn't mean sexual so ... I'm left wondering. Otherwise flawless, a real pleasure.
You are oblivious despite yourself. Get more funding.
I think you mean "perilous". 10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Subtle and smoothe tweaks. have a bow. I'm mobile again, want I should visit? Love the contrast of the static radio and the clear wndchimes. you are the great educator. 2nd of course to Z.
I don't drink coffee.'Tis bad for you. I do indeed suffer from a pain fixation. No, I kid, i enjoy every second of it. Hugs 'n' kisses! Great poeme! You should come over to my basement and give a private reading... you aren't allergic to napalm, are you?
Wow, sappy images AND a simplistic rhyme scheme too, how do you manage to eat 25 kilos of dumpster-dived cheese a day and write these heartfelt poemes (tm)? Lean over here for a nice bitchslapping with a firm yet yielding zero.
If there is any hope, it could change into something with writing talent and less of a tendency to really suck the big one. Let this zero symbolise a big razorgrin hug from me to you. Ia Hastur!
Ow! The angst! That hurt. I think blades of steel might cause agony. The seat of the soul is not in the heart. for the last time,it's in the left buttock. As for the last line, that's pretty much the advice I'm trying to give you, gothboy. Oh...don't cry. Here, have a kleenex, your eyeliner's running.
The point of love? From a strictly biological standpoint, that particular combo of endorphins is to ensure that our genes will be passed on. Then you get into that other stuff. I'd normally say,"don't worry hon, you'll find someone right for you one day", but you likely won't. remember, "the only constant in all your failed relationships is you." Hugs 'n' zeros!
If you're having trouble squeezing through, a little fisting will loosen that up.:D
I like the leaves of leather, but it should be SHOULD HAVE, not SHOULD OF.
That is all.
You are a funny, funny guy. Has anyone ever told you that?