Bachus
on some deleted poem
15 Jan 2003, 7:48 PM
Actually your conclusion right her sweetheart.
http://www.gangbox.com/mp3/anotherfunera
by the way. There are some hot dark angel chicks out there. ha! i never imagined. We will be together yet my betrothed.
Sorry, i've been just missing you lately.9
And there you have it folks! a half an hour with Bill and Horus8, come see us next week, same time, same place....on "LETS COOK WITH SULPHUR" thanks for watching us...coming up next Bachus interviews Nicholas jones in an exlusive behind the scenes conversation with the famous welsh poet. See you there..thanks for tuning into the 'eye of horus' on poemranker's underground channel "Quaker". <brought to you by 'dismal glasses' the only way wear shades and 'fotohut' more than just thatch and 5 by 7 double prints>
"To gain reason in what your after"
your should be you're. thanks for listening to these silly edits on my part, because editing is the least of your worries. Your poetry is contaminated by a slight case of the stupids. You're relieved.
"
inside my head,
a quick intake of breath
on these
strange beds."
might flow better like
inside of my head,
a quick intake of breath
upon these
strange beds.
Real good!...can dusty be another word though...more...i don't know rare?
the 'slowly' might look more sexy next to the 'that' and there was a speed bump on the tongue somewhere in the middle. lots of fun though! you're a realy clever writer that tis for surely.
who actually gave this a 5???
you
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a cheap beer
me
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a fine wine
i plan on researching everyone of
these scoundrels and writing a profile and a book about the
phenomena. called "the goat herders unite". what do you think?
You know who cares about your problems less than you do?
EVERYBODY.
That's the only thing I know for certain in this world.
wicked, o man. Even the lord of the flies is revolted by these acts. wicked, o poet.
Even a useless shit like me can feel righteous anger. I may be mad, I may be blinded by sadness, but I love this.
CONCLUSION: BUY YOUR CLOTHES SOMEWHERE ELSE .
you got this one down on tape yet?
or music written? I would be interested in hearing it.
email me. horus8@netscape.net
i have a studio and i would
consider producing you.
possibly.. for free.
we live in the same area
i believe.
very funny stuff.
excruciating.
Genius. probably one of the best poems i have ever read here. Wonderful. Made me cry. Poemranker must read.
Did you know in South America, the poor live on the hills and mountains above the city, and travel down to go to work. Watch black Orpheus, and if someone ever told me i was perfect i'd hold their hand to my crotch and piss a warm patch.
you've got to fix these question mark thing?s..shit?s..i'm totally ready to read all of your poems and these stupid fucking question marks are blinging me in the face. sorry, but i have to wait.u
"what switch
in our alien hearts
makes us part?"
needs one more word
like 'today'
or jete'
crochet
j-bay
(just kidding on the last one)
or some down beat
otherwise a serious favorite of mine..i realize i've been
giving you votes in this run that will keep you from re-editing,
that's cool, i understand..these poems are really moving and
sculpted, and i don't blame you.
enjoy.
Another favorite of mine. Fucking rad.