w~* ATHENA *~w
on Pro Forma by Jeremi B. Handrinos
9 Jan 2003, 11:31 PM
about time that electrical hair took over again.
suxor my coxor
I know all three of you are Dark Angel. The game is up, Moriarty.
I thought you were gonna replace it with something else. I'm amazed you've turned this into such a masterpiece. I especially like how you took my obnoxious "I don't care bit" and said "I don't care that Jesus was a male Hustler. I don't care".
Nice work-4th line from last is very good! 8
Someone once told me that I look like General Custer. But I don't have the 'tache!
Exactly.
Hi Settle.
You will indeedy
Art indeed.
Actually, that's a hello kitty shot. Lets sell it to Japan. I want 15%. And Half of the frachises royalties.
Better a wood stove than a burn barrel. Very well titled, and delivered.
p.s.--that's MY palanquin. and i'd appreciate it if you gave back my elephant. and my cabana boy. dammit, h, i never said you could 'borrow' miguel!
Really good!!! But soooo sad!
Beautiful poem. I can so relate 2 wat u feel.
I mean fucking come on, "flitting from shadow to shadow"? The drama imagery at the ends sucks shit and the only good line in this is "rough" and the two after it don't make any sense. Just fucking start over and make it worthwhile. THINK OF THE POINT FIRST AND GO FROM THERE.
"My life consists of homework, meal preparation and recreation
(like poemranker)." (like poemranker)->(like the discus). That's a bit funnier I think.
That is fucking amazing. you are a keyboard artist extraordinaire.
is it me, or does his shaft have a bit of a pull to the right. i mean his right? it needs a note to the reader me thinks..
i can help u, but i m too messed up