To bad YOU weren't shot. 0

For a 10 minute piece of poetry its very good, the last stanzas crap but apart from that it works really well, cats are like snakes with fur mine is truly evil. -7-

When you read this one cant help but feel quite amazed at how chipped we really are, and dependant on machines, its weakly told in parts and stron gin others but a good subject to pick up on -6-

If tomorrow is tomorrow, it is tomorrow tomorrow, dumbass. Yesterday becomes the day before yesterday. To summerise: Shut up and never write again, fuckwit. 0 for being so dumb.

Adam, you definately are not a man. I'll give you 50/50 on being carbon-based. 0

It's crap. 0

This sucks almost as much as your mum. 0

Oh no, more shite. God help us. 0

Full of hostility and interesting to see your reflection on a tainted chapter in your past, I read this as no one has read it for a while and liked it -8-

you shouldent be so hard on him this is a fine excample of some originality.

this is okay I have a feeling your not particularly bothered are you? heres a 5

heres a 9 for spending your whole day being fucked off whilst doing this

I marvel at your ability to bring words alive and tell it so vividly heres top marks for a fine pupil ..10

Did you write this on your travels? its wild and I almost enjoyed it as much as the one where you ripped the guts from the grandfather clock, didnt like the *PIFF* bit, it just fucks the end up otherwise perfect.

i like this poem. theres something there...something genius...8

You told this well, a poem about perspective / hindsight -7-

Its good but I think with your imagination on full riot it could be perfect. I think ZZinnia made a valid point. =6=

Desperation drips from the teeth of this gnarling beast, liked the overtones of darkness in this -8-

I was enjoying this until you repeated stanza 3. Its got a good narrative which is interrupted by the 'his might' lines they somehow affect the flow. Anyway It doesnt deserve less than a 6 I'm giving a 7 however.

how rude of me ...9