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insomnia

Member since 2002 · Posted 7 Jan 2003 · Edited 1 Jul 2006 · 16 comments

Still awake. this room is so cold. my eyes must be raw. this single empty room. these tiny blue pills in my palm. a heartbeat. and thunder outside. don't. don't even think it. Lie down, framed by the open window like a camera. And everything is white now. My breath is in my head now. That body in the hallway, that's me. My mouth is open. But I won't scream. Not out loud.

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[9] famenglory 7-Jan-03/7:17 PM Reply

wow

[7] RGallet 7-Jan-03/7:30 PM Reply

This is what happens when your mind wakes up but your body is still asleep. It's a common phenomena, actually. It's stopped frightening me. BTW the secret to a good garlic sauce, as it turns out, is assloads of garlic. Not a lot, or alot, but assloads.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 7-Jan-03/7:34 PM Reply

If you removed the first bit and the title, it would be an ace ending to a tale of creeping horror.

[n/a] Bill Z Bub › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 7-Jan-03/7:57 PM Reply

HP Lovecraft ain't got nothin' on me.
Except of course for his superlative command of English grammar and language. Or some such.

[9] INTRANSIT 7-Jan-03/7:42 PM Reply

I like it as is. But what do I know
I drive a truck.

[n/a] Bill Z Bub › INTRANSIT 7-Jan-03/8:13 PM Reply

Yeah, but I'm a minimum wage slave, and I write this shite. I think its time to become a professional student again.
Poverty is scarier than any ghost story.

[6] <~> › Bill Z Bub 7-Jan-03/10:56 PM Reply

i really hope those blue pills weren't wellbutrin. really. really.

WAKE UP, DAMN YOU!!!

[9] INTRANSIT › Bill Z Bub 8-Jan-03/6:44 AM Reply

Copy you I did, driver.

[9] INTRANSIT › Bill Z Bub 8-Jan-03/6:45 AM Reply

You're a fine hand though, keep up the good work!

[n/a] Bill Z Bub › INTRANSIT 13-Jan-03/3:30 PM Reply

Thanks dude.

[8] Caducus 8-Jan-03/4:44 AM Reply

Desperation drips from the teeth of this gnarling beast, liked the overtones of darkness in this -8-

[9] Ranger 14-Jan-03/6:34 AM Reply

Yeah, I like this-it's very good!

[n/a] razorgrin 14-Jan-03/9:25 AM Reply

terriffic. hp would be happy, despite the lack of shoggoths.

[n/a] Bill Z Bub › razorgrin 14-Jan-03/3:36 PM Reply

You don't see enough shoggoths these days.

[8] god'swife 14-Jan-03/4:13 PM Reply

Our bodies shall meet over such a dish.

[8] lastobelus 9-Mar-03/5:48 PM Reply

fast and good.