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Moon (edit)

by Caducus

Member since 2002 · Posted 17 Apr 2003 · Edited 5 May 2006 · 1 comment

Earth's stone faced widow stares through dark cumulus veils tides eye leaves jewels.

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[8] Ranger 4-May-06/8:27 AM Reply
Last line I think should be "tide's cataract leaves", however I'm wondering if there's a bit of extra wordplay going on there. Are you using 'cataract' in the 'downpour' sense there as well? Because it sort of feels like you are - particularly with the widow imagery, a woman crying at night maybe?