Amelia
on one word by Blade
11 Dec 2002, 11:38 AM
This does not in any qualify as a free verse!!! How can you insult the laws of poetry and call this a free verse?! Nicompoop! Imbecile! Twerp! Dweeb!
Death and Weakness?!!!!! You bufoon!! Are you gay?
Jeez razor, you are razor-like in your unforgiving "buzz off! finally!" signal you're sending. Do you really hate teens that much? They do make devoted friends.
Many typos. this reads like a letter, a sad pathetic letter. 'Maybe I was scared that the hard work was done' is a wonderfully insightful line. Scrap the rest.
did you write this or is this plagiarism?
Lol Razor, do pimple poems always have be considered terrible?
Hey maria, it's naive but sweet.
"Like lovers' limbs entwined" is beautiful. And so original! You should get this publish... Oh... oh dear... I... don't know what to say... I'm afraid I've broken wind. Would you like to breathe in my freshness?
1. Eminem has probably never met you, doesn't know you and wouldn't care.
2. When you are on poem ranker for a little while you'll understand that a large percentage of the population on this site are out of their teens and as such do not -because of even bigger problems- remember what it was to be a teenager with only pimples and boys as your biggest problem.
3. You will see in time that you will get over it and it may seem like a big deal now, in fact, it is a big deal but give yourself at least 2 more years and you'll consider your actions very stupid. But when that happens, don't forget how you dealt with your problem and expand on how much better you can solve your problem.
4. You're in the teen years, everything rubs you the wrong way, it's a known fact. Take this from someone who just turned 18 and is considered a little too wise for her own good.
Hey I liked your resolutions on the year 2003 by the way. stick to them.
"for you lovely shape" could use a little work even by my standards, but my dear, I definitely agree, it gets better
Baba, baby I think she meant 'most'. Not every babe is automatically a slut or "reeks (you used REEKS!) of death and weakness"
Oh pardon me settle, I ignorantly did not read the last part of your comment. You used some, forgive me.
Blade, you really need to get the movie blade out of your head. I bet you know every part of that movie. You and Maria should try not to enjoy the I'm-the-victim, everyone-is-being-mean-to-me rung too much. This is a poetry website. Take a break, like I do. If you wish you could just grab them and shake them, you can't. Besides, you sound extremely dumb and childish (pay attention I didn't say child-like let's not insult children) when you answer criticism with anger and curses. Simply take the criticism, better the poem or get rid of it and start again. Come back when your poems look less like shit(e).
Horrible title. Horrible poem. If this was just about wool it could be saved, but a clitoris? Though I guess I've never seen yours, and every vulva's so uniquely, like a snowflake, send me a picture, maybe then I'll understand.
is gonareha some kind of rotten balsamic sauce over rotten kidney beans dish? How about I give you what you deserve for your effort.
Alright dear this isn't half bad you just have to get rid of the things that make it sound childish.
To kiss him is to surrender.
To laugh with him, a lasting memory
Blurred not by time.
Vanishing like steam
His hands on me
Speak languages
Only my soul knows.
here I could spend eternity.
good luck with the writing.
Jeez Maria and Blade are getting the last rung since I've been here. Hi blade I'm the bipolar one. I was just about to leave and pretend I did not see the stuff I saw, considering that I have used english wrongly on more than one occassion, I thought I might have some compassion for you. Reading your poem twice changed all that, it is exactly what everyone else calls it: SHIT(E)!!!!
I especially like the way you understand you and she have nothing in common. The last 3 lines speak volumes.
Other than you repugnant love for shit ( I think you must talk to
your shit while you poop or something either that or you've eaten shit. Tell me, how did it taste, Like pig meat?) Other than that, this is funny. No really the last line is not sarcastic.
fuct.tape.alarm-clock.hoover.