eyeball soup anyone?

Stupid as usual. You used to write well.

Oh! you used djembes!

I see your friend has been here. does this disgrace you or just hit your giggle button. Or have you become a coward in the hours of your last breaths?

Could you write my wedding vows? Please? what if i throw in a little peanut butter pie(s)?

the last line almost ruined it for me, i hate flow interuption ! Okay then had my moan ! this could be REALLY good, you put a good slant on the philosophy of death and this simmers with empathy, its a real thought provoker so you've touched on a good subject, however carry on working on it, get rid of the numbering as it sucks, I wanna read this again when you finished it. And geez you gotta finish this, resubmit the baby for more feedback, zzinnia, gods wife, poeat and knowit, horus8, tintag intransit, and many more may occasionally criticise but they are crystal muses of help.

what is a pinwheel eye? And I have no idea what "i want to touch your area 51 you can be my agent Scully" but I like it. Pretty good stuff; just needs a bit of tightening.

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww a diamond tear from queen Mab's eye falls.

1st of all hats off to you hatters this is a moody piece and i jive it. Crows have dozens of myths about them, all of which insiduously creepy, I heard that crows wings are lifted by the stolen breaths of the dead and when they die their feathers are not scattered by the 4 winds, instead they are taken by the grim reaper for his mackintosh. Obviously its bullshit but I liked the story, my grandad rally scared the shit outta me, he never bought 'snow white ' as a bedtime story, and i too have written today of crows, have a 9 my favourite hare.

Good god this is bad. "Emotion dripped off her body"? Come on. that is the worst line ever.

This is good nice twist to greek myth.

shit its back on boys pass the plastic lightsabre.

Ha, another in the london boy gansta clan. Oh yeah, we like to fight and drink and piss in alleyways and listen to The Streets (who is actually pretty good).

Your poetry is unique and always caresses

Beautiful, something nice to go home on, i wrote one like this once called 'When I meet my love' there is something very romantic and mystical in pre conception of a paragon like a soul mate, good luck in your search hope you got the patience you'll need it. *8*

lord of the ringpiece, frodo is the fudgepacker of dwarves - watch out smurfs

A poetic snow shaker - made me feel happy of my roots and that makes me a happy metaphor -well done rkf

This is the shitiest, nastiest, most barbaric shit I've ever been unfortunate to lay my eyes on. You either need to get a girlfriend or a boyfriend, you're watching too much porn!!! your brain IS quite fuddled and this is the greatest level of obscene madness I've ever seen. I love it...NOT!

deep fried chickenhead mcnuggets and slow worms in fish, Macdonalds and snails are the least disgusting, lets have some more happymeal haikus

J-a-c-k-p-o-t ! *8