Good stuff all the way through and hearing it read was quite nice. Line 2, 3, 4 are top notch. One of the few poems here, along with the Chistof one about the fox, that are truly effective on another level away from the pimple shit and workshop wannabe muck.

mute statue?

So what? Well, that is about it.

Well let's see it started pretty badly, it tailed off in the middle and the less said about the end the better but on teh whole quite quite brilliant, well done ahmyerda, well done have a biscuit, or don't. Nae cunt likes a fat arsehole

Try 'enchanted by your....' that way you really have been transformed. This isn't about a tree is it?

1, these are haiku plural 2, i wrote a poem about you and i'd be honored if you read it which is to say i won't stop bothering you until you do because i love you and i want to have tons of babies with you and nobody but you and live with you etcetcetcwergfcerfderdfefd the damn thing scratched me as i was installinig a cat door

two turnips in ass. mocks the killing of sparrows. pass me the cole slaw. lol.

golden q-tip award. i believe this poem to be quite impressive in every sense and idea i can possibly fathom at this moment or any moment since. Cheers! 10!e

can one eat papadum with mexican food? the slasa's all wrong, i know... okay, throw in some onion, mint, and tamarind chutneys for appetizers, and i hope you brought the fixings for hot fudge sundaes!

interview well, do we. excellent.

This is # ten. Ten poems written in my lovely honor. Come on Bacchus. You are a pretty boy; a hit with all the ladies, do not be jealous. Just look at what the hard knock life has brought you: the talent to ramble (sometimes in decent fashion) and call it new and inspiring and saying anyone who questions the Henry Rollins style lacks depth or imagination or is not hip with the underground. The "subbacultcha." To learn to digest prison food properly. To drop names of actors that no one has ever heard of. Go find an acting job, slam the night away at the coffee shop, play your Tuesday night gigs and starve in honor the fact that you my friend are a true "artist" and me, with a wall of degrees, and a line of credit into the astrosphere earned with (yes, you guessed it) writing just doesn't "understand". There is art there. There is. Yes. Yes.

i leave for twenty minutes to go to the bath house and svitz a little, and look what you've done...ah?, i think it's very expressive ewerr..i'm relly quite overwhelmed ah..let's see i enjoyed all of it..the clear channel part was funny and the end and beginning were quite crafty... the language mixes are intimate..since i'm german, columbian and greek..also it's not an ode (thank god) and it has to do with alot more than just me, so i am flattered.. i guess to be a part of it all. either that or i'm a fool to comment at all. probably both. 10..i give you this ten for content not title..he he.

oh come on. don't exaggerate..."would you care for one waifer thin mint".

What? No cock? No cunt? Just a lot of words. Where are the Mexicans when the poem needs a good trimming? And the answers to rhetorical questions are the poetry, not the question itself. That is what we ask ourselves during the writing process, which this is obviously still in. You could cut this down and make it much more effective. Say lose 8am (who cares) Japanese (who cares - if there is a contrast meant to be there it doesn't work and gets in the way of the rest of the poem. Is scavenger a bit over dramatic? There are much better images to create the concept of invisibility or media created visions. "an income of" = wordy. The points of the last three are there. Are they not silent 1) because of a language barrier and 2) many are illegal and bringing attention to themselves would jeopardize the fact that many rely heavily on these (seasonal in Denver) jobs to support families back home and that if they manage to find a way through the middle man (which is rare) with the paycheck the money translated in pesos is good. And I am not sure about the burbs of Orange County, but most make more than 30 a week out here.

A tree perhaps? I shall post mine at once! Oh damn. I cant post till tues. That's it! Some one give me a secondary moniker please!

I read the rest of your stuff and liked it all. What is it about you damn californians that make you write so well? Drugs? Damn. should've done em when I had the chance.

smile. ah. yes.

tell that to sir paul's wife! ha!

moving

sheer evil. i will go now and count my pennies. i have no thoughts, BUT I STILL HAVE THE STAFF OF RELIEF! it would be funny if we could get christopher walken to read it..wow the image is nucleur. have a 9.