That's one bad case of c/t man. It seems to be affecting your brain.

No arguements here. Keep the left door shut.

interesting...

More old-fashioned than the other poems. I'm a great fan of Lewis Carroll, and Alice. Another 0, unbelievable.

i see what u mean i rather like dark angel myself he is very elusive and seems to be above everyone else

I was just thinking the other day: How do slums start? Then I answered: Overcharging real estate owners. And the band plays on....

Err, excuse me I'm kinda green here, what does this mean? Sorry for being stupid.

Maybe a month of his paycheck? I like anything that stabs.

Out here it's every wed. I wake up to the sound of leaf blowers and edgers. I can't remember the last time I did yard work, but I am a starving college student. There are armed guards at the grocery stores.

okay, i slacked. sorry. here's my thoughts: delete all commas. this line, --They are foreigners here. Obligedly brown and silent.-- i would change to: -Foreigners here, they oblige, ever brown and silent.- and this, to -A pale woman on her knees, I seem out of place pulling weeds by hand.- -In Belgrano, the Ghost Train rattles by. Commuters head out to the city, worthy and unconcerned with us others, working uncovered, They ignore the scavengers with their steel-frame contraptions- new stanza: -Yesterday at the grocery store I wondered whether or not I had the nerve to hide a three pound roast in my purse. I too am out of "respectable" work.- i think you need to accentuate the word 'respectable,' because poetry and gardening are respectable, more so than soul-selling for six figures. can you imagine landing that kind of cash? at my job, i am amazed at those who make 10x my salary--they have a specific vein of expertise that is currently valued highly. they have trouble opening and printing documents; apparently, they are too 'respectable' to be bothered learning those skills. of course, there are exceptions, as everywhere in life. did you take the roast?

yes the angel is not so dark now hehe

do you actually know dark angel? (or baccus for that matter?!)

I'm dumb-founded. This took me a long time to read. I guess I should start with something smaller and work my way up. I'll come back again and vote. I need an aspirin.

This is my favorite poem here, so far. It makes me laugh but it is also very honest.

I've been through two suicides in my life now.(not me)I'm hardening to them quickly. They're sad and selfish. nothing more. funny write.

You are by far one of the best poets here. How could anyone give this a 0 let alone three of them? Wow, that really impresses me. Here's a 10 to even things out.

The word traiterous seems out of place. You write from the heart.

i think horus8 and dark angel are ledgends im becoming quite a fan of u both.

Personally, I dig the mix of free verse splashed with rhyme. An enjoyable twist. The waking could be an artist, loved it.

i dont agree with some of ur work DA but i do think u are quite incredible. keep it up. i gave u a 4 coz u havnt got one 4 this poem yet.