you have the wit, of a harpies tit.

I see Settle has been at it again. DA will you blow him already.

Oh my God yes. Bring the last to lines back up. They belong there, common, that's the point after all. Make them common and humble, like you.

a few suggestions: i think you were trying to make the words lap, as waves, by using all those commas. what happens instead is that thoughts bleed into one another, un-detectable from each other, and the wash of words turns this slate to mud. so, give me a few solid thought fragments, then lace them together. see what i mean? also, "emperor" is spelt wrong. lovely imagery overall, but it makes me wish desperately that i knew what you were saying! this one is worth the work.

What does "cuz" mean? Pimple poem.

Is this person in jail?

Pimple poem deluxe.

Obviously just another punk song.

I get lost in all the useless language. Adjectives and adverbs everywhere.

Write me a love poem dickhead.

wait a minute. i didn't know platic bled, plastic girl! are you transforming into metal'n'plastic girl?

Pimple poem with fries.

amusing, but could you condense? why does it need to go on so? i don't think it does. you whipt those words into shape in your other works; put down the cat and HONE!

What is a smurf?

wow. that's some a-1 berating. success! go on, quit now while you're at the top of your game, genius. have some ballast. love, z

tell my friend pan..come back home when he can. 9.

I really like "chaste to be chased", but I think you should change the title of the poem to "Holy Shit Batman!! Look at these adjectives."

What does less than 3 mean? Is that like 1 or 2? Oh, I see, it is about sleeping with less than three guys and really wanting to just sleep with one but being secretly afraid of the responsilbilities of commitment? Am I in the neighborhood? This is deep, black head stuff!!!

This is terrific writing. Great rhythm and rhyme. I wouldn't change a thing. To you, sir, goes my first ten.

I cannot say I care for this one much.