Caducus
on My world Of Emptiness by abbaslittleclingon
25 Nov 2002, 1:15 AM
not bad, 1st line definitely doesnt sound right, check the grammar ok?
You could have carried this on to hit home your message harder. however I liked it, some nice phrases a.l.c
similar to some stuff i have written. i like the language of the poem. good job
i got the tune of "No Rain" by Blind melon in my head while i was reading that...which made it even better then it already was.
that's great...really good actually.
damn dude...that blows for you
that's one long ass poem..decent
YOU TWAT you stole it go suck off a monkey cum back and write a poem about the discomft and pain of that!!!! to be honnest its too happy !!! AND also writing poems aobut angels is a god loving fucked up christian kind of thing to do go fuck your self your god too
LOL!!!!!! thats not football thats masturbation
oh god please tell me this isnt a poem devoted to your mother? see my poem what mother and farther taught. (dont mention the spelling a pretentious twat has already done that)
wait...is this all some sort of joke...or are you serious...cuz i hope it's a joke..the chorus is funny...but the rest...well it's funny but not in the same way.
funny how 3 of 4 of your poems have anonymous 10 votes...secret admirer, perchance? or not?
GOOD WORK KEEP WORKING WORKER
Why the extra V?
With all those big words, I was going to ask "Did someone find a dictionary?" but then I noticed they aren't used right or even all spelled right. (Tuberculosis)
Line 19, "and my keep my dreams within it"... is that supposed to read, "and keep my dreams within it" ?
9.
Cliche but nice. 4.
it's almost too much for me to handle