razorgrin
on some deleted poem
9 Nov 2002, 5:56 PM
queen of the harpies!
Damn! Damn good! Hua!
Well, there goes my theory about bums having the most freedom! HA! What was I thinking? 8 for your eye-poking the rich and "synthetic infection"
Assuming this is ending on a positive note, I like it.
you lose the rhythm in the last stanza
pretty scenes and memories
this is the angriest poem i've ever read. got a solution, or just a problem?
yes...you should go!He/she obviously isn't sure of what they want enough for you to trust them with your emotions. Perhaps if you show independance he/she will be more attracted to you-What am i doing? This aint no problem page!!!! Errrrr...Nice poem, good flow.
An interesting exercise in imagined dialect--"doth" in line 4 seems off; maybe "do" would better serve?
queen of the harpies!
queen of the harpies!
queen of the harpies!
queen of the harpies!
Funny and so so true!The first stanza is the strongest. You should print this poem out and hang it on your office wall then see the faces crack!
queen of the harpies!
queen of the harpies!
I didn't give you the 3, but here I went and offered you civility. At least you've shown what an ass you are. Call your mom. oh, wait, i forgot! the bitch is dead! she's in my zombie army now. says you're a sad little fuckup and she always faked it with you. So much for my attempt to simply ignore the gaping void that is poetandbabbit.
wow