Dark Angle
on Raw Suicide by royalflesh
5 Oct 2002, 1:13 AM
nice use of the word schmuck
aww really strange, too vague and strange for me to comprehend, shit its late, i will just give it a 5, in case it might be good and im just tostupid to seeit
god, that was a lot of words to read
again, i cant relate, maybe if you wrote more about porn or stars, or porn stars!
nice trick
I really liked it!very tender and heart-piercing!BUT what on earth means that HORRIBLE homepage?if you really feel your poems you'd better do away with that page!That was not Sorrow nor despair and not even nothingness!I felt really disapointed!I hope you change your mental picture!Horror!
I actually think this is brilliant. Can't understand the negative responses. Right up there with Anne Sexton's "Fury of Cocks".
If I give it a high vote will I sacrifice your place in the worst list?
cannot undertsand why u got the 1's and 0's... i like this one
I value the content, yet it tends to wander a bit back and forth. I feel the vibe you are projecting. It works.
hey loneshadow--this has promise. i suggest making the language more languid. it reads stacato, and if you are longing for her, i'd think the words would be more sultry, more mellifluous, more dreamy. good effort, though. z
don't u meen 'wubb'?
i lub u 2. poo. hey z. the mp3.s have arrived.. how was your day?
hmm, i wish this sort of poetry interested me so i could praise this poem, but i do not connect, sorry, the porn star sonnet was a slam dunk though
well how bout i tell you who to kill and you do it then! we would make a great team, and then when you tell the cops it wasnt you, you had someone telling you what to do, you couldnt point me out in a line up! damn this is just too perfect!
inkling? thats a cool word, and katie is a cool name, but you over do itwith wastrel, and respite, thats a little much too. i wont even get started on blithe, come now, please
well when you die you will get your #, the line will be very fucking long, and yeah, its a cheap thrill, anything with as much hype as he's been getting is bound to be
lips, hands, minds curling together, fun stuff
oh godkill me please
hmm, will i? who are you to say? i dont think i will so there!!!
this is cool, it ryhmes a lot and is easy to read