I am a great friend of Jesus'. He told me to tell you your poem makes him smile.

I also wanted to mention Line C loses it's sting because it doesbn't have the flow of the others. Maybe you could switch the grammer around a bit to unstop it.

Lovely, just one typo- 'autumn'. I like the last four lines especially.

A bit political maybe?

Falls flat on it's face.

Goofball. Loved it. If you want, I'll score it. Just say so.

I have these dreams too. It would so liven up the city.

Good poem. Carry on.

I voted last night but was to tired to comment. Excellent. Cuts to the quick. I'd love to see a whole series of these illuminating both sides of this bitter greedy coin.

I feel good after reading this. Quiet and sweet. The image "death in autumn" is slightly off. Autumn is an active part of the cycle, winter is death. I see the relationship between the leaves falling, but the tree has not gone dormant, everythings waking up after summer. Maybe I'm too particular. Lets see waht others think. All in all a lovely poem.

THis is a great lyric, it shows about the true imagineation of a lyricist

you just need a better ryhme scehme but overall one of your better ones

This has the feel of something old and timeless and traditional. It takes talent to accomplish that.

I'm gettign lost. "Wetness finishing"? No entiendo?

Really enjoyed it

Very deep - enjoyed it immensly

Too bad this kind of thing is still going on! Quite enjoyable,thanks.

You promised a poem on entropy and, my girl, you delivered. I am slightly freaked by beer excreting stuff - I shall steer clear of the pub for a while I think. Great image to choose.

Well peaches, somehow I overlooked this one. "didn't even bleed " threw me off a bit, but the title helped. Very clever. The last 3 lines are beautiful.

okay.