<{Baba^Yaga}>
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2002, 1:46 PM
you're Autumn. every year. from now on.u
see you're still owning the sky...fabulously indiscreet..
WOW
And your point is? There's some nice wording in places; 'slinging slugs of muck to the wind' is lovely, but the ending is cliched and dull. Have a 4, as an encouragement for future efforts.
Born to run!??
Woah... this is trippy horus... IIIII like it :o) 10 for ya!
i'm thinking she liked it just enough to smile through the cross examination and bring the jury to tears of joy...plus she's twenty three now and stripping at the purring pussing in reno and it's all Bachus's fault for corrupting her mind and sending her down that path of 'vaginal self loathing'..pray for tuna....damn him! he has toe nailed another to this cross of shame...oh ye oedipi are foul..FOUL I SAY! loving you more by the second...get ready for fourty more mp3's on the gangbox site for indecencies...submissions pending due to choice discrepincies and gangrene..new videos without superman next month... beware of st.germaine and the charasmatically uncomitted (with his side kicking sloth) and cunt whistle the magpie for the love of heckle and jeckyl...t
This has not come from your pen, but from your rectum instead. 1. 'My wittle honey' is so nauseating that I dry-retched on impulse, and the only saving grace is that you do not thrust more of this bile upon us. Terrible.
A Beatles fan are we? 0. Your imagination appears to have been stunted at birth.
fiddling casper again are we? Shit!...my tater-tots are burning i gotta go..i'll be right back...singed scrotismal sac. asia? is a state of mind..rewind your videos damnit...rewind!t
Perhaps people stare, say mean things and do all the other actions mentioned in your poem because your poetry is so bad. Have you ever considered that? Hmmm? You score 0.
you ever step in a puddle o' puppy piss at 4 in the morning in the middle of winter in detroit with socks on..new socks no heat...bad dog..lights off. stumbling around? good ..now we have something in common and you know just how i feel.p
Nice, apart from the final line. 8. It's a little bit flat. 72 anonymous votes of 10 though? Marking your own work only cheats yourself. And makes you appear lonely. Don't stoop that low.
Leaving something this open is alluring , to say the least. Good job RB, and welcome.
Repetetive. A good start, you can do better. Don't say it. FEEL it!
i dont like it not much coming from me i know but i just dont like it
Funny. What is ??170 composations???