Birth

I always expect the last line of a haiku to have a disjointed feeling from the first two lines. Trying to follow the poet's leap is part of the attraction of the form. This seems too close.

Most people are ignorant, I think; they don't realize that haikus are difficult to write. Nice job.

Curt, decisive, and to the point. You will get wet, you may get soaked!

Good. Finally, the proper conflict of imager that haiku depend on.

don't quite get the last line. but otherwise perfect.

note: envelopment. (no third 'e'.)

Wow, people like this one, don't they? Yeah, it's great, but... I don't know. It's just not ME.

This is good. It's content suggests more of a senryu than a haiku. It's use of the form is very faithful. Spell checking would've helped ;)

too "eventful" to be a haiku really, the haiku is like the nut of one moment seen and cracked gently. also dunno if its accurate .. birth only explosive in certain circs.. water birth not, the essence is being "unwrapped" being exposed to whatever it iS that is prepared on the outside. like a poem really

the big bang...fantastic

Im sorry i do appreciate abstract poems, but I dont really understand. I was thinking it meant first u feel safe and cuddly then BOOM!!! things go wrong.

hhmmmm i do not kno but it sold me short this haiku will be a ponder in my thoughts

Primal, raw, thus lacking some of the Haiku's elegance, but a fine effort.

image/image/image....good job

Nice imagery :)

73 10's, Jesus Christ. What are you some kind of Messiah, cuz I read the poem, and I'm a little dissapointed kind of like that time I was doing a photo shoot of Sue Ann, and we had her naked up there on the hood of the car and , and.. then we hit that bump and she went under the front right tire and crushed her tit all up under me fender..She broke three ribs, but the pisser was the silicone took a month to scrub off from under my fender, and it fucks with your chrome too. Plus she was a bit out of commission, you know sexually. She could still cook and clean. But I had to jerk off for about two weeks there. So, it reminded me of that kinda.

return to the womb haikus are cliched

That was a pretty good haiku.. uve got some talent.. keep up the good work! :-P

Oh my God you have 74 "10"s. Wow. The imagery creates a very nice love scene. This is good.

Nice, apart from the final line. 8. It's a little bit flat. 72 anonymous votes of 10 though? Marking your own work only cheats yourself. And makes you appear lonely. Don't stoop that low.

It would help if it was spelltt proopperrlie -nah-sorry it didn't sdo it for mee-1/10

I agree that the haiku is somewhat eventful. Is there more of a moment you can capture? Perhaps stay with the moment right before and have only the anticipation of explosion?

I like the haiku form though and I agree that it is not so easy.

Wurgh