INTRANSIT
on some deleted poem
25 Sep 2002, 5:34 AM
Not at all. I see this and feel it too. Really good actually.8
ha! love it christof. nicely done.
Please write a short story.
but can you open the windows of your ninth floor condo to lay out the offering? and what gifts have you for the butchers? (you make a tantalizing image. i once went out in the morning to find my car beset by a flock of about 50 vultures--just hanging around in the low branches near my car, like they were waiting for me...creepy. i was living at the house that inspired 'secret, admirer,' and the vultures were a large part of the weirdness there between the edge of the swamp and the woods. after that experience, seeing a vulture pressing the 9th floor glass would make me lose it, me thinks. nice job.
And if you were a fish you wouldn't need any damn bicycle!???
Thanks for the tour. You make me nosatalgic for a place I've never seen.
I'm falling in love with you. You are one of the few best of luck to you.
This is a real progression from your last poem on this theme - smashing. Bleak though.
Baffled by Royalflesh's comment, but thinking this poem is great
Did you hear hear Mr Blair banging on about 'regime change' on the news last night?
Why do all the best Welsh poets write in English even when, like R.S. Thomas, their first langauge is Welsh? It's a vexed question - I looked at this in my thesis on Edward Thomas and couldn't really come up with one answer. The Welsh language is under siege, in literature at least, and has adopted a very insular mentality. The eisteddfod is such a retrograde institution, but what is the way forward? I like your poem. Speaks the very small bit of Welsh in me.
Thanks especially for the car park attendant's jacket. This is a very warm poem despite the coldness of its subject.
Have you been watching Bargain Hunt? David Dickinson is like a god. Anyway, this is great. I love the idea of selling antiques in the name of socialism. Perhaps I will devote myself to this when I finish my PhD. You bring in history (Cromwell and Ireland) in a way that fits with the poem and is integrated into it.
This has a 70's black movement feel to it. I cant see the depth,but I can feel it.7
Yes, yes. s-4,L6 lose the"a". 8
Never got to go to a big college like you blokes. Maybe I'm better for it. Who knows. I should read some cromwell. Ireland has been calling me for years.(i'dbetter go soon) Ports are heavy but go well with tiramisu. I like parrano myself. Great content good beat.8
You ARE prepared. Yup put label back on. Then "acquire" a ride!
Descriptive warm fuzzies abound.9
Blew my wad on your other poem, liked this one too.8
The openness is what makes this work for me.7 Know this: Only you can set yoursel free!