Tintagiles
on some deleted poem
25 Sep 2002, 4:45 PM
Sweet Jesus in whom I do not believe, this is good.
Wow! I love how this "twists" my thoughts - very refreshing.
Fuck me. What an entrance. Come in and take your seat. I am shocked into a silence. Much like prayer following disaster.
I give this 10, because I can. And as for bigbigdog/astro-glide,cfarm/mentor/fred cadawalter/Turbo-Tom/Shrimp-Kills
Ignorance is a rare exotic fruit; touch it, and the bloom, has gone.
very nice. i like the alliteration bumping along. this sounds like someone else on this site, though. are you Dark Angel, by any chance? the style is so similar. 2 things: 4th to last line, take the s from "towards." and "hiway"? great stuff, keep it up, Cobalt, if that's your real name!
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
25 Sep 2002, 11:23 AM
um, let me guess. you're bald? i'd like the poem better if your user name were afro-dude.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
25 Sep 2002, 11:25 AM
i think my wife would agree with all these sentiments. nicely put. why don't you do all that you say and then blame it on one of the slower students when it comes back to bite you? that would be a real hoot!
and of course, the fates couldn't keep out of it. and, do they REALLY live on the 14th floor, or is it the 13th,and they're just as superstitious as the next lot? damned seasons are a bad influence. summer makes me fucking crazy. winter..let's not go there. great poem, tho. have a high score
Imagine all the pain and suffering that will dissipate when people listen to their own hearts instead of"society". Ifind no flaws.10
Entrance? He has been here all along. Hear ye, oh hear ye, this is the one true god of the pimple poem!!
Yes, line breaks. Another good topic. Take heart, you're not like them if you're asking "why". Keep trying but...BREATHE!
I perceive sadness and yet like your reference to "absurd" - very philosophical!
I wish I could right as directly as you. You don't seem at all pretentious.
You're sick with talent. How do I learn to write about things outside myself? I love feeling incompetent. It motivates me.
Dream away. Have your visions, it is your right. Why doesn't God set things on fire anymore. The burning Brita pitcher is telling me to bring you the good news.