yes.

rudolph?

Let's not forget Big Matriarchy. I like this poem, particularly for the environmental and socio-political awareness it engenders.

love canal/love american style! the small see everything. thank god i'm hung like dick cheney!!

maybe? wow there's a new way to resolve a situation....i'll wake up..maybe?...i'll eat today maybe..i'll vote on this...maybe...maybe not.??

One of the best things I've read here for some time. Frankly i like something with a bit of edge. This is up there with the other bloke ;) (but edgier). Love the way the title suggests the poem is ambiguous, yet for me it has just the right balance between ambiguity and plain narrative. Too much obscure imagary around here for me lately. This cuts through some of the wool like a knife.10 (and i'm fussy).

Cigarette poems seem extremely popular and frankly i think this poem stinks. I'm very rarely hyper critical and will certainly read a selection of a poets work if i have a negative reaction to one of their pieces. I hope i like another piece better. The last stanza sounds like it was written by someone who does not use English as their first language. "Oh Mama"! .0.

I like your poems. I've noticed your use of vowels sounds, and it's very pleasing. The last five lines are confusing for me, the second to the last line is in past tense and then the last line is in present. (also typo line 3, 3rd stanza)

I'm having trouble with all the commas. I tend to overuse them myself. Otherwise good, particularly the last stanza, it's pretty and careworn.

This poem is terrible.

Man, THIS is lovey-dovey? Probably best to keep your distance then, I suppose or you'll go into diabetic shock.

all i know is it's hot out, and that's all i know...have you seen doylum around lately?

No... but I don't expect I would. You see, none of us are really here... there is a man, at a keyboard...

Moving, depressing, thought provoking. Plath-like. No angel, no hero, only bitter memories.

i know its lacking, but i don't believe in changing or editing what i write after i've written them...and this was the first poem i ever wrote a little of 5 years ago...i think its good for a first timer

Hmm... "Sweet Home Chicago" probably isn't the best background music for this one... Mmm... Zomblues.

Like with Zzin, tell me you're not just reeling off all these new and excellent poems, GW! I'm gonna read them all, again. 'When you bewildering me like sudden rain came'; could a comma help in there, somewhere? (I'm just grasping at straws to hopefully helpfully critique something).

Black fart: (free form) by chok negros., spring is the season to run naked black and farting through the putinias. alas there's my angel following my gas...of fairlass might you thumb my tight arse so that i might run my fingers through your hair..your golden crown of amber blah blee...oh hug me until gas leaks first out my ass then out my foul mouth, and you fly up and away into the sky...nay we need not editing we are brazen lass and in love...you turned my black fart slightly off purple, because you love me..............dude..pack up your things. you're fired. g

I love your poem!!

I don't believe you meant for all those question marks to be there. You might want to take a look.