god'swife
on A journey to the sun by kawakurdi
31 Aug 2002, 4:51 PM
I was really getting into it and then the last stanza seemed comparetively immature. You're a good poet none the less.
trahison des clercs!
I just fail to see why he feels the need to bitch to me about Shin's stuff. what, am I going to give him the message or something?" sweetie, that jackass on the internetdoesn't like you." I find it strange that he can't do that on Shin's stuff. Besides, i have already mentioned about how stupid this argument is. he won't let it die.
You have not seen me ten times and I have no trouble with making mistakes, but you just can't bend the truth to make your point. You have no interest in helping me,(ergo, never having time for me let alone my poetry) as a poet, or a friend. Just look at the so called comments you left on my submissions. I'm not being righteous. I have never been such, and you know it. I have never held myself above anyone. My entire life revolves around that one fact. Think about who you're talking to. My user name has nothing to do with this.
You've never even seen me read many times how could you possibly have seen me apoligize many times. You've seen me read what, 5 times at the most. You are mistaken.
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8
31 Aug 2002, 4:51 PM
Pull yourself together, man! Do you dare defile the priceless Ming shores of Poemeranker with introspection? This is a place for honour! For glory! For victory 'gainst the ogre of Sin! Don stirrups of inhuman strength and a stained tuxedo and take it like a man! For when you are olde, and your children's children ask you, "horus8, what did you do on poemeranker?", how will you reply? That you gained valuable insight into your life? That you conquered inner demons and came away refreshed? No! You will triumphantly shout that you Logged On Stoned! That you posted up to three times as many poemes as any other poete! And those grandchildren will look up at you, tears forming in their useless eyes, and in that moment, you will be a man, my son. Ho!!!
because you sound ridiculous and self righteous, as if you're above it all...and for the sake of whatever lets just say two of the five (actually closer to ten) you didn't falter and forget a line..there...you also didn't appologize then giggle and go back to read it again from memory for a crowd of hormonoley inept coffee tasting brutes going wow sweety i like your tits keep on reading that high falutin trash talk, i'm gathering up a chubby over here....who cares..what difference does it make? oh so what even god's wife is above making mistakes and appologizing? you're right...folks she's never appologized for anything and she's right...i'm just attacking her, because i'm insensetive and in a rut?........you are hardly worth your two cents let alone the pocket dig. sorry, you can keep it, no appologys...i know when i'm bested...i'm just going to go piss in the corner now and pretend that god really does have a wife and if he does, i now know the reason behind his absented presense here, you obviously have everything under control.
Make no mistake, I am well awrare of canada's problems. You simply are a condescending, ignorant, boring ass who has only made reference to issues in his last post oand for that matter has yet to state the community college that handed him his degree in accounting or whatever it may be. i didn't write this poem anyway. don't blame me. All that you have done is shown yourself to be a hypocritical bore who uses too many words to state very little. Now let us ignore each other forever more.
HA HA HA ha ha....oh... Both of you are full of shit. You're having an earnest, heated argument about whose country is more naughty over the internet with someone you've never met. If you're going to argue in public at least have the decency to insult each other instead of meaninglessly attacking each other's country. poetandknowit: Clearly, Shin-Bojangles is not trying to write serious poetry. The rest of your argument is just groundless speculation that his prose is crap. razorgrin, stop defending your fucking boyfriend. If he's really here to take the piss out of pompous poetes then let's see him do it himself. And so sayeth I.
Back then, I wasn't praising your writings, I was praising you. I still do. You just keep losing yourself in everything around you, even in the words. Stop worrying, everything's going to be o.k. Let it go. Start making sense for yourself. Is writing or being an artist all you value? Your writing is more confused then it needs to be to maintain it's edge. Your life is confused. You have to make choices. I'm well aware of the shit that runs in my viens. The artist breed, but I will not let it ruin me. I'm not asking you to write differently. I'm suggesting you write more effectively, take it or leave it. Your extravaganze pauperizes you.
1) i have seen you many times appologize, not for your poetry, but for forgeting a line out of it while you were orating,(melrose coffee house last year, whittier coffe house 4 or five years ago) and i'm just saying...fuck the line, nobody knows but you, replace it with a random connecting thought.improv, act, retract...nobody want's to hear anyone read something from a paper or from the inside of their minds...here's a thought ..relive it each time anew...it stays fresher, 2)and what kind of advice to you suggest i give to some of these kids...huh..your creative writing lesson of the week?...i fucking help the ones that i can, in a more creatively inspiring manner, by making them think in outside terms? this is not a poetry workshop for fucking teaching cads and cretans it's poemranker...there is no need to sit and explain to them all , "hi, i'm god's wife i think you should listen to more t-rex and read blah blah dickinmouth ble. here capitalize this, erase that, stasnza blee.....cuz i'm god's wife which makes it what. worthy? wow you're right sorry, after all your god's wife...... okay here ye here ye the wife of id will be selecting a group of twits for a good grinding all aboard!...some shit just isn't that easy...you either got it, or you don't. you do, and so does babbit,and dark angel isn't at all a serious writer?, and neither is bachus? or whitman? or shaskowski? cuz they're just playing? fuck that this is a forum, fight or sit in the stands, but teach in another corner that's your job not mine. i say push until pulled!
shirt? good idea, but can we still do the earwig thing? goodluck in misery razora?>>>>>>>>okay gw you got me there, i concede. for now, but how are any of ours or anyone elses poetry supposed to come up random if it's been all nentwined and occasionallly da'd...figure out that one.??
I help the ones that I can in my way that's the beauty of it. I have never named anyone as being unserious. Least of all you. Why are you attacking me?
no earwigs, they are made of evil.So, g'night everyone.
Uncorrupted. Succinct.
I like this. sorry horus about the new york thing. anywho, i'm heading off on my own magical misery tour soon, so i shan't be here all day anymore. Your stuff has really cool imagery. The line "have you succumbed today" rocks. Can I put it on a t-shirt?
I love this poem. I think it's 'wood' not woods.