nor can he walk on land. gills be damned, toss this one in the...can...

yes, this works really well when read fast and rambling - took me a few reads to get the cadence right, but yes, I've got it! 7/10

How many red seas are there? This is just plain bad stuff. I was trying to like it, I swear. But I just couldn't.

I am quite fond of beer, but not this little ditty.

figures...this is pseudo menudo- minus ,the goodlookin one (mexican 80's band with the 'livida loca' fag in it, or just cow gut's)

jesu can! if you fix line 9,and 18...but only if you've been circumsizedand you're from the 'chosen' creed. 5

that line refers to the clientele of the restaurant district where the riot took place. On second glance, without the background info, it could be a little confusing... Thanks for the input!

how in the fuck do you illuminate a candle? with a spotlight, and your use of the past tense in the present would make a real german like mozart, chew his way through bone dirt and wood to find you, to chew!

Hmmm. Being from the Midwest and having to constantly defend our cultural heritage is not easy. People forget that the likes of Twain, Elliot, T. Williams, Burroughs, and let's even throw James Ellroy (although he writes about LA) into the mix so we can have someone living and relatively known, all live or lived in this fair region of the bible, corn and football. However, I'm off my point here. Like I said, it is a struggle. I say "Ten mediocre writers will get published living in NYC before one good one does in the Midwest." La de da. In one ear and out the other. I am off my point again. But it is a hard defense when the likes of this stuff is posted on the site for the world to see. Needless to say (but I will) that it is lacking a good deal. It is one long cliche of meaningless hogwash. I don't care if you keep it posted, but change the fact that you are from Iowa. Please. Say you are from Kentucky. They write like this down there.

Not at all crazy in my opinion, but I'm sure the poor girl has long since run screaming from your obsessive clutches. 8/10

Good stuff. I don't like the word "sustenance," but what the hell, it barely takes anything away from the poem.

you're absolutely right p&k, but they also share another mutual aspect, they all left after high school, or a four year college to get masters degrees at other schools out of the midwest, or went and lived in new york, europe and a few other spots to get published, then moved back later to live out the rest of their lives...enjoying the real pleasures of the midwest, family bonds, food friends, fishing drinking, and sitting just plain lovingly bored... and of course the one of a kind down home atmosphere....you do, on the other hand, have something in common with all of them other than location...you have the need to create and the know how talent to both publish and respect the difference between those that might and those that 'will'. you sir will...goodnight and god bless.. your friend jeremi britt handrinos..

Wow, this thing is popular. However, I am not sure what all the fuss is about. Yes, the poem has quite a few nice line and a few exceptional lines, but on a whole, it is relatively, well, over intellectualised. It is as if you tried so hard to show your reading background that the allegory pops right thru (as you put it). And Blake, fuck you, people don't work in the modern style or the traditionalist style. Dude, modernism is over. For christ sake, go to fucking college and really learn what traditionalism and formalism and modernism are before you throw the shit around this site. She is simply employing allegory. Duh! Look it up and quit masturbating with the British Lit book. It is unbecoming.

I am by no mean an expert of this form, but I alway thought the syllables were different, or is that the point with the American Haiku. Moreover, why disgrace the putrid cow town of Des Moines with the misspell? Explain the motives because the piece does not.

it almost seems as though you are using this as a mantra to convince yourself that what you two have will finally save you...

what a fucking waste of web space. dark angel, granted is a pretty creative writer, but lets have a little self fuckibg respect "for the love of god, your groveling impudence has forced me to de-cork yet another bottle of merlot....this is trite hog wash to put it mildly, to put it harshly, this is pan's clefted hoof squashing his own piled shit in a moment of fairy fucking debauchery...it stinks man pure and simple...neither amusing or serious, somewhere in between shitsville, wyoming, and sawdust, delaware...you are a chinese snakefish that can'y even speak chineses

<<Why does I have not find>> what? who? or, most importantly, WHY? why does I have to read this? why does the author torture me so? <<But how, till when , who can help me ?>> did you hear that out there, WHO CAN HELP ME????

more pointless lesbian trivia...wow! you're so brave to be outright gay and proud. unite.unite carprt munchers unite..we've been repressed by phallic symbols and the "man" for too long, lets worship the stink of true love and vaginad tongu flicks...leonard cohen would break his guitar over your head in spanishy bound exctasy.g

more pointless lesbian trivia...wow! you're so brave to be outright gay and proud. unite.unite carprt munchers unite..we've been repressed by phallic symbols and the "man" for too long, lets worship the stink of true love and vaginad tongu flicks...leonard cohen would break his guitar over your head in spanishy bound exctasy.g

hey z ...let me guess? you were eating huh...hope it is was good.. we all deserve a great meal after the trials of the remedial day...i'd love to cook for you and introduce you to my family and friends if you're ever in my neck of the woods, just say so, i'll put you up for a few nights...and show some of the better aspects of la. glad you got home safe...your friend h....o