Nicely done. 7. 'Keybored' is a great line. Some lovely imagery.

A delightful first poem Ming. 8. The contrast between the simple yet effective words of the poem and the more educated title is inspired stuff.

oh and peta, kittens, wolfs, and daft little pussy petters who still don't appreciate the value of editing are next...so..prepare..silver, black crack smack your poodle with mothers velveta cheese stroodle..prepare!e

This is awful. 0. The form makes it a swine to read, and when you get to the end you wondered why you bothered at all, such is the first-rate drivel contained within.

Far too preachy. 3. The repetition of 'back in the days' throughout the poem shows a lack of imagination, and coming to think about it, so does the poem in it's entitity. A bore from start to finish. This poem tells me nothing.

Are you religious? Or is this a message to love yourself? 3. The poem is reasonable to begin with, but then turns slightly ludicrous and ends suddenly, and with completely the wrong ending. Or at least that's the way I read it.

Grim. 7. The content is slightly disconcerting, but the fact that you've created such a graphic image with so few words is a skill indeed.

Dear Bachus: I'm not sure what to do concerning "The Muslims." I would not do what good old "George" is planning to do. Personally, I think that Mr. Bush is losing his mind! Perhaps he should consult Mr. Reagen for some advice----It certainly couldn't hurt----given his present state of mind! Feel free to share your submission concerning all of this to me: dougsod@wcjc.cc.tx.us Doug

Yeah Dark One, that's redeckulouse, and obserde! tosey the leste. How dare you deprive a beautiful seventeen year old wolf who loves bottled kittens her beautiful world saving opinion, or mongrel saving opinion, you sir have a hamster wheel powered lima bean shaped heart that beats backwards. Of all the nerve! Wear the scarlet letter of shame and dunce hat the madness that twirls from under your plundering demeanor. You are just plain mean.

As I said before (it mysteriously vanished), this is in no way original. You read it off a bathroom wall, or some such thing. Put up your own work, asshole!

I shall and will doug, have a splendid day, and i'm ,lol! with you...but i don't think goerge jr. really ever had a brain or a thought of his own...research shows that the presidency is just a front in this country...in actuallity we are controlled as a people by a mixture of four people, barry diller, david geffin, some mysterious drug laundering king pin(who lunches with clinton and tyson chickens don tyson, and the great great great grandson of the schmuck on the quaker oats box! pilgrims revolt and tan your white is right souls to a deep reddish brown...the indians were right, to dip the whites in honey and bury them up to their necks in fire ants! CHANT! CHANT! what was i saying...ah yes....the muslims are next on my list the submission is almost ready, so be steady.yes and prepare to really fucking hate me cuz i'm about ready to shit pure brown fire hose madness all over this patheous to optimism...

You have no say in what i do either. You have no right to tell me what to think and do cause i live in america where i have freedom of speach. I care about everyone around me but you can't be sheltered from the world forever. I chose to show people what is actally happening, not telling them it's not real and just a fantasy made up in peoples heads. That's rediculous and obsered. So get a life.

plus..somethings in this beautiful world are not beautiful. so stop trying to cover up for them.

Tarquin: Thanks for the suggestions. I guess that "Break fast" is fairly cool. I'll take a look at the middle section of the poem. Thanks, again-----Doug

You are incredibly easy to please.

Brilliant! 9. I almost lost control of my bowels whilst laughing so much. You'd have got a 10, but for the lack of an apostrophy in prostitute's. Sorry for being anal.

Did you delete all the comments saying that it wasn't an original limerick? Naughty!

Good stuff

Very nice. 8. I like the detail and the narrative tone.

I think I was at that Widespread concert, too!