your muff not only is unapproachable, but it soaks up butter like mashed potatos...do you soak up butter like mashed potatos...boy..all of this food talk has got me hankering for a hunk of cheese...o'doylum rules.......zip.fiat.diaper.curtains <brought to you by 'scrawney' the real way to wear a belt, and 'irish flings' if you don't take her home tonight, there's always mannana>t

"Spicy" and "Entice me". Hell that'll do nicely. Any rhyme like that gets my attention. Short and sweet. Simple but there's a pleasant image there. Have a nine.

negative d.a, i worked on prolonging the magic...john mcCrea is a genius and a fine human being...i helped on "Mexico", and "alpha beta parking lot...both musically and lyrically, but john was by far the master mind behind it all, a true poet and gifted musician...somethings are better left unsaid....all of their work is above the point of pointing though to say the least o

Hmmmm...Two nines and a two, seems to be splitting the voters. Beautiful start, particularly enjoyed the juxtaposition of (what i supposed to be) the cool evening on the swing and the fire. Peaceful porch against roaring fire imagery. I'll give that bit the nine. But the political references later left me colder..."United States...". But hey, I'm British. I'll average out at a seven and check your other work.

No. I'm sorry Horus, having reviewed several of your submitions, I am sure you are capable of better writing than this. Borderline poetry, more likely poor prose. Try to concentrate more on the imagery and less on the gratuitous profanity. 1.

horus8: Did you write the lyrics to 'Comfort Eagle' by Cake? Which of their songs did you write lyrics for? Or have you simply turned our beloved poemeranker into a House of Lies?

what other meanings are there my dear?

Wow, thanks for considering us lowly folks. Considering it is you and I, or I and you on this site at this afternoon hour I say we are in the same boat, but you are off to meet movie stars (since you have an in with Jon Voigt can you hook me up with his daughter. I hear she is almost single and goes for cowpokes like me) and I am off to dine with the ex-governor. It is his 50th anniversary with his wife you know. And he is the leader of the LA schools, you know. How long has he been with his mistress? I am so impressed by your success in the Utopia of Clowns. We are in such need of the high art in Hollywood. And from what I have seen, you love my work.

Why not use your omnipotence to enlighten your serfs?

horus8 you not only hummble me with your sage words, you wet my knickers with delight at you sheer capacity for wonderous thought, had i not encountered a being like you my life would have failed long ago, if but one of us can bask in the glory of an unknown band then i for 1 am all for it. More power to your mighty thrusts of wordsmithery.

i'm sorry, but that's to fucking sweet, jesus christ be my wife, i can't help but think you are toiling with underachievers why? why? why must i be prone to such filthy sentiments?...aye...because..i am filth..damn skippy, but you my dear ate prometheus's liver and squeezed his member skinny...tis better to wipe your feet than wipe his brow 9/100

'lo. this is what i think. stanzas three and four weaken the poem and are unnecessary. crepusculation throws me off. it seems... forced? otherwise, some nice rhythm and phrasing. this poem could, in general, use a good tightening up. there are strong parts indeed, but which are overall weakened by unnecessary lines. i would call this a good, first (or second?) draft, me, in terms of the sort of revision which should be attempted here. contact me if you'd like further detail about this.

when is the next cake (what a wonderful name) album out, i do hope its as finely crafted as the gagbox no its not a joke really its not. so many instruments so little time, yet you do seem to concentrate on one instrument in particular.

Thank you, you are beautiful and so are your Cake lyrics. Doylum's favorite band is The Monkees, so what does he know. And this 'piece' is old, I've since wiped my feet, as you suggest.

The old omnipotence things not working again is it. Monkees! oh child but yes far superior to placenta or whatever the fuck.

Doylum, you fecking cunt, don't you know that when Frank Sinatra sings Stormy Weather the flies and the spiders get along together? Hmm? Hmm?

auld clootie builds you all up to a maginficent point, which he makes ever so well, with little to no conceit like the deity he is he give quite selflessly, jesus fuck have i been reading this right, no says he you are the shite below my well shod grisel my purple clingons are more sentient than you, i shall mail you some forthwith so that you may share in my supremity

Define freeform

oh fuck i've weed all over my new going out kegs, shit

Smash Mouth, Sugar Ray, Cake -- that is an impressive list. All bands that have mastered writing the same song over and over and over. Are you in Death Ray too?