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on Daughter by pkdrunner
15 Aug 2002, 7:40 PM
nicely evocative
This isn't my dick, Doylum. It's the Holy Dick of Jesu. You WILL fall to your knees and WORSHIP IT.
gee, thanks! (sarcasm)
well, i had to please, after i so sorely let you down with my non-specifically shaped letters poem. sorry to use the shrine of the holy dick of jesu as a forum, -=Dark_Angel=-. may jesu save us all.
For fuck's sake. How many people are going to have this misconception? horus8 is not a teenager. He is a HARD-HITTING SLAM POETE. But not a street poete. P.S. He did the voice of Leon Spencer in Sniper, whatever the living fuck that is. So don't you be dissing him. Just diss his poemes and possibly his face if you can't think of anything else.
Yeah... That's actually total bollocks, isn't it? And even if it's true, the thing about poetry.com is they have three rules: 1) Publish anything 2) Publish everything 3) Publish it as fast as you fucking can. So it really wouldn't be too surprising or interesting. What *is* interested is where exactly this poeme is. Is it this one or a different one? Not because I doubt you, because I would never dare doubt the word of such a clearly talented poete, but, for example, what's your name? Poetry.com doesn't let you search by poem title. Where's the list of poemes for that book? Etc. You don't seem to be in the list of poets by region when I click on Australia. That's funny.
yes my dear, say you love me and we shall run away together, we shall start a farm and raise hotdogwenners* together, i shall suckle them on my mighty man nipple and together we shall rule the world, or althernativley na not really though i am aroused by your f-hole.
sorry my writting lithp appears to have reared its radiant arse again
you mustn't apology to the son of satan, he will only lure you to his pink and fluffy domain with his cunning linguistics. I only showed initial disappointment at your poem, but its to late now, 7/10 not good enough for ye your want the moon on a stick - well i'm taking my bat and going home, to see what other possibilities such gaming equipment offers
If you spent as much energy writing as you do whining you might actually write something worth reading on the site. You must get over being intimidated. It is the only way you can move on from mother. And by the way, razor girl, drivel is an archaic noun, but I do believe it is also a good old verb.
All the poetry I have ever read has "done" next to nothing for me. Perhaps some poetry will at some point in the future. But there is no point in me trying to create poetry in a different style when I have nothing appealing to go on. I am the enforcer of verbal justice. My voice is strong and commanding. You know very little. -=Jesu=- is on my side. Poo. Whatever.
I don't get it. Are the words willing, or is he? In any case, any poeme about a wedding should feature the word 'JESU' written in asterisks 70 feet high. This poeme does not. Therefore I can give you no higher than a 2. However, since I have given up voting, I won't.
I was talking to Bachus. Your poems are hilarious, especially that dwarf one. We need someone here to mock the form we try so hard to take seriously and over intellectualize. The teeny bobbers don't get it because their hormones are flying everywhere. If you are a teenager, I apologize. This guy, bachus, seems to take everything personally and seriously and try to cover up the fact he does not by posting this crap, which really wastes everyone's time. So if he put the whining to writing he just might have something. Sorry to talk about you the 3rd here Bachus.
You should take tips. You're a measly 15 year old. How do you think you can get better without listening to people who can actually write? Where are you people learning this shit? When did a simple line break become a use for the ellipsoidal? A line break is a natural pause in poetry. Simple as that. At this rate, it is going to take two hours to finish reading this.
thanx alot, i know most of my "writing" isnt that great. (i dont know if i can even call it work). I am going to try harder to work on writing skills and stuff like that and maybe try never before done writing techniques.
again, with the putting words in my mouth. doylum, you're jealous aren't you?
N't.
I don't know what this is about, but it's the best incredibly violent poeme I've ever seen.
Who said anything about hours8. This is Bachus' stunning work.