Venus
on some deleted poem
15 Aug 2002, 11:13 AM
And yes, I have written many a sonnet; none of which I would have the 'balls' to post here.
Good concrete imagery. I don't like the use of THICK, but it makes sense with some of the other stylistic choices.
Still mustn't grumble. 9/10
Still mustn't grumble.
most of my poems are just one act...i build up the need for a release and just start writing about what is troubling or exciting me until i run out of words...they are a combined long running history (long being the last 7 years)
Your inability to pay debt marks you as one of the great unwashed. As for spuring me my dear you have never and will never be fortunate enough to gain such an opportunity. Although you right about the immediacy thing even when i try hard not to. It was my anticipated glee that was so cruelly spurned.Have a good day at the office Hugs and kisses Doylum
Yes i doubt that this type of peom will ever cease to be created and posted on this site. Daily.
ah, dearest d, we come from different worlds, don't we? i never said i was UNABLE to pay my debts... that's not what it's about. at all. sorry i didn't live up to your expectations, but i bet that happens a lot. regardless of my own state of 'unclean,' i feel that the poem is clean. ta.
We may indeed come from very differnet worlds although i fail to see how. Inability to pay your debts is most certainly what its about whether from a lack financal or moral ability - I'm alright Jack keep yer hands of my stack. Yes my expectations are dashed not infrequently, thank you for the concern. What world do you come from?
i guess what i was trying to go for was that there are wonderful, beautiful things to see every day--any day. It's just a matter of seeing it and taking note.
my world is so very similar to yours that sometimes i think that they might be the same, but then i remember: my world is full of grey. my world is refillable 3 times before 6/28/03. the edge of it scars my feet. on either side is a chasm. the path will flatten again; it always does. have you forgotten what that's like, to be away for a while? or are you an uber-mensch, who has never lost his balance?
i never got there in the first place, my balance is of an egg, thank you for calling me dearest, and for listening to what i have said. Which wasn't more than drivel, but you responded in kind, but at least a bit of discourse, which here is hard to find.
I must eat and be merry good day my dear.
Thie poem is... wonderful. 10/10
I am so very happy for you. :D It's about time. You've deserved someone like her for a long time.. and oh yeah. Beautiful poem, as I know it is written from the heart. *hugs*
I just really appreciate the work that goes into constructing a decent sonnet. Good work. 8/10
yum yum. drip drip. i hope they have an enjoyable evening....
genius, as always. brightened up an otherwise shitty day.
no, this will not do