Not bad. 6. A nice ending, to what otherwise was a disappointing piece.

I like this alot. 8. I'd improve it by changing the last line to a question, rather than a statement. But that's just my opinion. Even so, jolly good show.

Cracking stuff. 9. Your words are perfectly chosen.

Sorry, but I fail to see this working on any level. 2. Poor.

well mine host, with these you are really spoiling us.

Chestbeating stuff. 7. The choice of language is very evocative.

Are you a tits man, by any chance? Softporn pleasure written for your own gratification. 0. Terrible stuff. Please don't inflict this bile onto anybody anymore. Redeeming features? None. Simply the image of a tit.

yeah..i know..i know, it's a really old piece, but i kinda enjoyed editing it for this site by leaving in the childish shit cuz it is so fucking silly sounding and cutesy..i thought fuck it..it's more homely that way. nobody likes a writer that can't laugh at their own adolescent whining and pining, and i'ts interesting to compare it to what i'm doing now..i think?..ah fuck it anyways..moving on..

what a riot...definetly a rockford fosgate 12" woofer. 8/10??

de capitilize..and quit screaming..it would be so much better underwater quitely rendered 7/10. hocus.jaundice.lice.malicey

Its like leaving the wine in the bottle for another night. But its such a young vintage, to drink it now would only be to spoil. Fare-thy-well my child for i shall returne

Jesus! You score high on this, if not only for length! 7. As a lyric this song must be a concerto by itself. Ultimately however, you loose the overall impact of the piece by writing verses which vary in quality to a huge degree. From the good, to the downright stinky.

This is an very personal poem, about my utter disgust at schools and their inability to give good blowjobbery lessons. Don't use yer teeth, don't try to rip it of with yer hand, and don;t gag on it. Simple really. It hurts me that you don't like it, it was a painful poem to write, as unpleasant as the lass who inspired it.

because it felt good

Great stuff. 9. 'Quick escape ye to the bog' is sheer quality.

would have been a 10 but that line 'the lonesome buzz of redundancy', well how do i say this politely? oh yah it sucked :) so i gave it a 9. i really loved this. well structured, well written.

Crap. 2. You want to take heed of the last two lines of your poem sir. Wake up, and then try to write something which isn't so utterly dismal.

Nice. 7. One of the few lyrics I've read which hasn't made me think of dire thrash-metal eighties bands. Good work son.

I enjoyed the ride from addict & pimp(?) to tree-hugging writer, and the shame that accompanies your past. I also feel that it would work well with 50% fewer words. 7/10

This is crude, which is nothing wrong in itself, but then needs something special to lift it above the mundane. The poem does not have it. 5.