Takay Shitar
on Master Chef by Takay Shitar
9 Aug 2002, 3:54 AM
im glad u enjoyed it
Decent. I'll give it a 7.
too hot 4 TV
nasty!
This would make a saucy Janet Jackson song... Well done, and then some, Da1
If you published this on greeting cards they'd have to be marked with a WARNING: very sexy label
Hmm. kauri sounds like it could be a tree. I don't know what else it would be, but from this it sounds very treelike. which makes the haiku essentially pointless. so I'll presume it's not a tree...? ... google search. nope, it's a tree. maybe I'm missing something else?
I think I like what you're trying to say, but I'm not sure exactly what it is (if anything). ... ... too confusing.
that's some intense child porn you've got there. fairly well written, but... is that really what you were going for?
it starts out like...oh fuck me not this again, but then the bullshark and Avon come limping to the rescue <bullsharks occupy fresh water also, so lake campers BEWARE> drink red bull, brought to you by 'cork' it's more than just a floating reminder!e
this is a radical brash piece of proper teeth twisting writables.
YOU GET THE HORUS8 GOLDEN CUE-TIP AWARD FOR INSOMNIACS THAT CARE BROTHER. sleep well hitchcocks dead and so are the birds!10/10s
Exquisitet
Thankyou 4 reading my claim to fame peice. And i ecspecially am invigerated by the sauciness of your work... Da1, blushing
If you published this on greeting cards they'd have to be marked with a WARNING: VERY SEXYlabel
So, you can cut and paste. it's his comment you rascist puke (i read black buns). What? so you added a the last paragraph!the title is the best thing you've written to date AND HALF OF THAT ISN'T EVEN ORIGINAL.in fact the whole thing isn't even original. therefore you my friend are totally unoriginal, and you should beat yourself to death with a nasty borrowed baseball cap that reads "mustache rides 5 cents". you fail!
Your imagery is quite lovely, and such wonderfully nasty verse.
Dickensian? I'm way off. You put us, as readers, there.
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Wasn't I who?
I probably did contradict myself; it was more of a stream-of-consciousness thing that just happened to rhyme.
whafu?
Sleeping with the fishes. Greedy mermaids with smoke in their eyes.p