Re: As The Days Turn to Months by DevilBuni	Dovina 12.72.7.170	26-Feb-05/5:24 PM
The first 2 verses say it all and pretty well. Consider dropping the last.
Re: Forest Rain by bamf909	wilco 24.165.207.93	26-Feb-05/8:47 PM
One of the better Haikus I've seen in a while.
Re: Dancing on Glass by thepinkbunnyofdoom	James Rykelangeli 169.229.90.109	27-Feb-05/1:19 AM
your imagery is pretty but vague and empty. specify. excise the banal phraseology: "connect the dots," "secrets... hidden in plain view." overall, though, with potential.
Re: Oh holy shit by Lucifer	James Rykelangeli 169.229.90.109	27-Feb-05/1:49 AM
A superb commentary on the mindset of today's international youth culture. Your vulgarity and absurdly emphasized rhyme scheme are in perfect keeping with their vulgar sexuality and lack of culture. Sublime.
Re: It’s the Management by Dovina	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	27-Feb-05/2:49 AM
9/11 was a tradegy for all concerned. But I think the term "boss man" contains redundancy, because all bosses are men by default. You might also consider replacing "lesser" with "female" :( -no vote-
Re: Invisible Wounds by Fearlesfan_04	Fearlesfan_04 129.66.1.202	27-Feb-05/4:00 PM
Thanx for liking my poem peterson
Re: Homecoming Parade by wilco	Dovina 12.72.14.72	27-Feb-05/6:05 AM
Thought provoking. I can hear it with an acoustic guitar from a coffee house stool. Not bad.
Re: How Do I Become a Poet? (with John B. Benitez) by Vince Dolamando	Dovina 12.72.14.72	27-Feb-05/6:25 AM
Poetry is something you read after you have written it and eliminated the obvious mistakes. It's a fine point I know, but try to master it.
Re: Ode by James Rykelangeli	Dovina 12.72.14.72	27-Feb-05/6:31 AM
Very funny and nicely done. It makes me laugh at myself. Welcome to Poemranker.
Re: Ode by James Rykelangeli	thepinkbunnyofdoom 66.42.231.212	27-Feb-05/8:07 AM
Touche. -9-
Re: Hunger 2 by Dovina	edpeterson 68.79.203.220	27-Feb-05/9:24 AM
I would vote, but I have no idea what this is. It might be very good, but it is written in a language I do not speak.
Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	James Rykelangeli 169.229.90.109	27-Feb-05/3:42 PM
nothing to object to concerning the technique: the words read smoothly, and the dropping flower cleverly solidifies the structure. its excessive sentimentality, however, weakens its potential cuteness and whimsicality. as for reducing the sentimentality, i'd excise the superfluous sunrise and rewrite "Her gift floats through time/ and past memories," as it's currently trite but has considerable poetic potential. still, i'm only dwelling on the poem's few shortcomings. overall, impressive and expressive. well done.
regarding some deleted poem...	Plaidypus 68.14.27.48	28-Feb-05/5:04 AM
They probably AREN'T trying to be viewed as respectable.
Re: It’s the Management by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	28-Feb-05/5:11 AM
Do you always go down when your boss tells you to?
Re: Background Noise by Plaidypus	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	28-Feb-05/5:16 AM
A terribly dangerous poeme with grave consequnces for the unwitting reader.
Re: Hunger 2 by Dovina	al-naafiysh 204.215.34.188	28-Feb-05/5:17 AM
Do you think they will get it this time?
Re: Ode by James Rykelangeli	zodiac 212.118.11.12	27-Feb-05/10:03 PM
Welcome to poemranker. It's funny you wrote a poem in a stuffy contemptuous rhetorical style about stuffy contemptuous rhetorical poets.
Re: Homecoming Parade by wilco	zodiac 212.118.11.12	27-Feb-05/10:05 PM
Please consider dropping the "I quit my job" and "I quit my life" bits.
Re: How Do I Become a Poet? (with John B. Benitez) by Vince Dolamando	zodiac 212.118.11.12	27-Feb-05/10:07 PM
I'd guess you probably just need to grow about twenty years while not ending up like Dovina.
Re: Hunger 2 by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	28-Feb-05/5:25 AM
You have finally cracked.