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edpeterson 68.79.203.220 |
22-Feb-05/7:05 PM |
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this stillis one of the best poems i have ever read.
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| Re: Pennies by woodstock20000 |
zodiac 212.118.14.17 |
23-Feb-05/3:13 AM |
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You sure do a lot of grieving for those days. It's kind of sad. -10-
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| Re: Mistress of Dreams by Dreammaker1024 |
zodiac 212.118.14.17 |
23-Feb-05/3:26 AM |
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Could you explain the line "In their palms they hold my depth"?
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| Re: Jack and Jill by Dovina |
zodiac 212.118.14.17 |
23-Feb-05/3:31 AM |
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INTRANSIT 205.188.116.67 |
22-Feb-05/11:22 AM |
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Hamsters have asses? i thought they only had fuzzy little.... never mind. Plenty of potential with this. Can you read more into the pattern on the sole? How/why did the pebble get wedged there. The "neck" being the head is definitely new, or is the wearer the one with the hole in their head? Throw some hips to the side.....
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| Re: Boiled by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 12.72.4.46 |
22-Feb-05/2:38 PM |
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Boiled?
But weren't those days in the valley sweet. Until the eruption, the realization of lies. Still it was sweet. Volcanic ash'll do that to an artichoke, as lies to a heart, but hey, shake off that ash, bloom, a little grayly maybe.
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| Re: Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet |
Dovina 12.72.4.46 |
22-Feb-05/2:42 PM |
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"layed" in the first line. And I think what we go through for a hunk is more than a hunk goes through to get layed.
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| Re: It's a Mammal, Stupid! by D. $ Fontera |
Dovina 12.72.4.46 |
22-Feb-05/2:44 PM |
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No excuse. You start well.
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| Re: Pennies by woodstock20000 |
Dovina 12.72.4.46 |
22-Feb-05/2:47 PM |
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Scratch the last line. The first 5 lines seem bulky, wordy.
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| Re: Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet |
Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
22-Feb-05/3:09 PM |
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| Re: It's a Mammal, Stupid! by D. $ Fontera |
Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
22-Feb-05/3:10 PM |
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| Re: Pennies by woodstock20000 |
Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
22-Feb-05/3:22 PM |
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All pennies come from Uranus
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Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
22-Feb-05/3:25 PM |
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Proof a dildo can be infected with crotchilla.
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Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
22-Feb-05/3:26 PM |
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I mean do you guys really all sit around with this much cum on your faces wondering who's gear stick
your going to ass cram next?
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| Re: Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet |
PodPoet 68.6.188.203 |
22-Feb-05/3:29 PM |
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| Re: Pennies by woodstock20000 |
edpeterson 68.79.203.220 |
22-Feb-05/6:47 PM |
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Do you really want that many periods in the last 5 lines?
I kind of like it, against my will.
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| Re: Jack and Jill by Dovina |
INTRANSIT 205.188.116.67 |
23-Feb-05/6:42 AM |
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Didja see the lawyer show where the guy killed someone and the whole reason behind the ordeal was he didn't get a date from some chick. In the meantime he became muslim (extremist) because they supposedly believe women are inferior. It was funny. And scary.
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| Re: The Mushrooms' Song by zodiac |
edpeterson 68.79.203.220 |
22-Feb-05/7:55 PM |
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Revisiting this, I have to say I think it is brilliant. That last stanza is quite surprising and reveals a lot..,the way the cat is sucked in, in a comparatively short instant...the mushrooms growing at a completetly negligible pace. And it feels so dank.
Anyway, I love it.
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| Re: Jack and Jill by Dovina |
edpeterson 68.79.203.220 |
22-Feb-05/8:04 PM |
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| Re: The Runaway by bamf909 |
Dovina 12.72.14.41 |
22-Feb-05/8:07 PM |
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Yep. Done that. Not bad atol.
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