regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	22-Feb-05/5:01 AM
Is this about the old Yugoslavian dictator? If so, it is really toss, however, if it is about one of the Jackson 5 then it is really toss.
Re: Hunger by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	22-Feb-05/5:03 AM
Like a society without peasants, this poem has ideas well above those it achieves. There are too many arisions.
Re: Hunger by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.14.17	22-Feb-05/5:43 AM
Dear Christ this is bad. I mean, not just grammar bad, Though that's a big part of it. It's simply philosophically unsound, Callous to the extreme, Dangerous, And all around poorly conceived and phrased. To read this comment, please print it in a single line of text on a rock and fling it at your head. I'm being absolutely serious. So none of this 'zodiac just likes to pick out little things and ignore the blah blah blah' crap, please. PS-I just read your comment beginning "War is bad." Consider taking some of your own advice.
Re: Boiled by INTRANSIT	zodiac 212.118.14.17	22-Feb-05/6:21 AM
its' should be its. Artichoke, what?
Re: Kaleidoscopic (Re-Edit) by Sasha	zodiac 212.118.14.17	22-Feb-05/6:23 AM
These are the rough lines: with old components, as you brush or soap, with stranger friends who blow us off with “Nope, - I can't say what's wrong with them exactly, except the first one should probably not have a "brush or" and the second is simply too run-on to end with Nope. I can't remember how it was before. I thought maybe better?
Re: A Child's Christmas by Sasha	zodiac 212.118.14.17	22-Feb-05/6:26 AM
"But stopped because the star was not the floor" is too cute. :-(
Re: Kaleidoscopic (Re-Edit) by Sasha	horus8 24.130.62.63	21-Feb-05/5:43 PM
It puts the lotion on its skin
Re: Carson City by A. Nomaly	horus8 24.130.62.63	21-Feb-05/7:01 PM
po'erful
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 212.118.14.17	22-Feb-05/6:30 AM
A shoe with a head? What the fuck ever!
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 212.118.14.17	22-Feb-05/6:31 AM
Jesus, two mad/sad rhymes in one post. -2-
Re: Help me find a poet (This is an actual question, not a poem) by Plaidypus	zodiac 212.118.14.17	22-Feb-05/6:31 AM
Jeremi B. Handrinos
Re: The Plane of War by MacFrantic	zodiac 212.118.14.17	22-Feb-05/6:32 AM
Before reading this poem, I didn't know war was bad.
Re: Boiled by INTRANSIT	edpeterson 68.79.203.220	22-Feb-05/7:04 AM
the whole metaphor is a bit silly, and that is good. and that rhyme at the end is funny, heart to choke never to bloom artichoke. I like artichoke hearts in a nice oily pasta salad, virgin and salami, some garden fresh cherry tomatoes and buffalo mozzarella, fresh of course.
Re: Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet	edpeterson 68.79.203.220	22-Feb-05/7:07 AM
what?????
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.203.220	22-Feb-05/7:19 AM
Fucking hilarious. Hits so close to home. 10
Re: Hunger by Dovina	edpeterson 68.79.203.220	22-Feb-05/7:31 AM
ugh
Re: Hunter Thompson, In The Off Beat Chance Of Cunnilingus by horus8	edpeterson 68.79.203.220	22-Feb-05/7:17 AM
not too carefully, I hope, or that 300 dismissal lingers, smoking a camel, right around the corner! I wonder about the words "venerated" and "fiasco", and whether you might not find something that crystalizes what you mean there a bit better. This was an absolute delight to read. It purred down the screen, finely oiled, smelling vaguely of Big Mac droppings and fat cubans. Your hair was dark and short. Nice touch. Just excellent writing and a 10 When are you due back to AP? Are you even coming back? I hope so. Things have grown a bit dull in your absence, and in the void you left, I am being attacked by all the illiterate teeny boppers, "U R an Ass. Do you get off mAkIng fun of kids with ADD?" etc etc etc...Also, I have some problems with the sound on my PC, so can't listen to the music you send me. Shame that. Trying to remedy
Re: The Plane of War by MacFrantic	edpeterson 68.79.203.220	22-Feb-05/8:06 AM
and the wormy piles of colons strewn across the land glistened like thin wet rats and nobody listened. the side of the bus read "fuck off" and so i did, and spilled my drippings on the bloody red madness of the day in a skirt
Re: by PodPoet	woodstock20000 209.40.29.2	22-Feb-05/8:55 AM
Um, oops?
Re: Pennies by woodstock20000	nentwined 64.60.192.130	22-Feb-05/9:31 AM
I like the thought; think perhaps the poem would work better if you just started it at "I used to always think", maybe ending one with one last line summarizing the cut lines--"I grieve for those lost days"