Re: Help me find a poet (This is an actual question, not a poem) by Plaidypus	Bobjim 195.93.21.65	21-Feb-05/11:00 AM
has it occurred to you that several people match that description, it could even be me.....
Re: Brother's Egg Book by Jeremi B. Handrinos	bamf909 4.254.219.166	20-Feb-05/12:26 PM
I don't understand the second line, and scribbles/quibbles might be a bit forced, but I like this poem, especially "Piling things around Me, in squares, and Suspensions."
Re: A Violent Autumn by bamf909	wilco 24.165.207.93	20-Feb-05/1:04 PM
Ok, yeah, I like this. Much better than the Pirate thing.
Re: Get in Line by MacFrantic	bamf909 4.254.219.166	20-Feb-05/1:25 PM
A bit vague, but i like the ending
Re: Loves Struggle by hummers86	sliver 172.163.35.86	20-Feb-05/5:59 PM
Are you decomposing in that lye in your bed?
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.13.237	20-Feb-05/8:24 PM
This starts as a beautifully written nature poem, with the freshness of a new convert, but it sinks as nature does to its beginnings. I think you need a long stroll in the rose and camellia gardens of the Huntington Library. I hear they’re lovely this time of year.
Re: Help me find a poet (This is an actual question, not a poem) by Plaidypus	horus8 24.130.62.63	21-Feb-05/1:16 PM
What are you high?
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.67	21-Feb-05/5:33 AM
It's got a couple small holes. I'm optimistic.
Re: Hunger by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.218.91	20-Feb-05/10:03 PM
What means "up utensils I indulge in" or "me a plate of food?" I guess you can't start reading just anywhere and have it make sense. However, in some African countries or on a plane wreck in the Andes, "me a plate of food" does work.
Re: Summing Up by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.218.91	20-Feb-05/10:05 PM
Nicely put.
Re: Hunger by Dovina	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.67	21-Feb-05/5:40 AM
I can picture it . Since it happens so quickly, lose the commas.
Re: Hunger by Dovina	richa 81.178.251.87	21-Feb-05/6:25 AM
In free verse each line should always be semi-independent from the preceeding text i.e. it should stand on its own, therefore the instructions should be to you not the reader. Other than that be wary of using labels for abstractions 'mental formulations' 'volition'. It is always better to show than tell.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.4.56	21-Feb-05/7:47 AM
Are you trying to prove that your poetry sucks. To what lengths will you go to avoid kuddos?
Re: The Plane of War by MacFrantic	Dovina 12.72.4.56	21-Feb-05/7:52 AM
War is bad. We know that, and unless a poem presents something unusual about it, the thing falls flat.
regarding some deleted poem...	nentwined 64.60.192.130	21-Feb-05/8:43 AM
cute. verging on limerick. seems more like a DA poem, minus the aids, prawns, and feces.
Re: Help me find a poet (This is an actual question, not a poem) by Plaidypus	richa 81.178.251.87	21-Feb-05/11:48 AM
That description is not much use. But if you are serious about them having more poems than you have ever seen, go to the users page click on poems at the top to sort users by number of poems and check through see if you recognize any names. It may have been Christof or poetandknowit or edpeterson I guess.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.67	21-Feb-05/12:56 PM
Could this be the one that gets me into the bottom twenty? Then and only then can I feel comfortable calling myself a true "poet". Until then, I carry an upturned schnoz.
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	21-Feb-05/1:28 PM
Spliff
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.12.77	21-Feb-05/3:23 PM
Nonsense, and the spacing's bad
Re: Hunger by Dovina	horus8 24.130.62.63	21-Feb-05/3:44 PM
There is something excessively fat about your ass, and it's not your thong.