regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.12.72	19-Feb-05/8:13 PM
Somewhat repeatative, but nice
Re: For Elizabeth, Wherever She May Be by wilco	zodiac 212.118.14.17	20-Feb-05/5:35 AM
This is good.
Re: Brother's Egg Book by Jeremi B. Handrinos	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.67	19-Feb-05/5:15 AM
Something tells me this is a one-timer, pure. I'd leave it if it is.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.67	19-Feb-05/5:29 AM
Pick a city, any city.
Re: For Elizabeth, Wherever She May Be by wilco	Dovina 12.72.10.8	19-Feb-05/6:32 AM
No, I couldn't stay mad. It's a pretty good poem no matter how old you are. It had more to do with some unrelated baloney. I hope you’ve got sunny days wherever you are.
Re: I AM NOT CONTAINED BY THIS UNIVERSE by Prince of Void	Prince of Void 217.218.131.165	19-Feb-05/9:19 AM
I AM NOT CONTAINED BY THIS UNIVERSE
Re: If God Was a Nihilist by baughworm	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.67	19-Feb-05/5:40 AM
Seems to get rolling, then stalls. Encore? Maybe check the definition of nihilist. I'm not sure.
Re: Rusty knife to the kidney by INTRANSIT	Dovina 12.72.10.8	19-Feb-05/6:36 AM
Wow, bet he never fixates again. Comes from the Bible story about woman made from the rib of man. Had to laugh, hope you meant it funny.
Re: Dustin(Incomplete) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	MacFrantic 64.12.116.67	19-Feb-05/9:41 AM
Hey! That name is my own, without the whole (incomplete) deal.
Re: Step Up by Blindpoetry	Dovina 12.72.8.90	19-Feb-05/10:16 AM
The first verse is great, but what happens next? Misspelling and misgrammar to be sure, but what are you saying?
Re: If God Was a Nihilist by baughworm	baughworm 24.223.169.10	19-Feb-05/10:24 AM
nihilist: someone who rejects all theories of morality or religious belief
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.8.90	19-Feb-05/10:49 AM
The stomach lining of the anaconda that just swallowed you?
Re: Topic of Death II by ARTIE	some deleted user 216.135.39.196	19-Feb-05/11:40 AM
Fuckin love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The Peekster
Re: Step Up by Blindpoetry	RION12 64.136.26.226	19-Feb-05/3:22 PM
What are you trying to say? You most tell me. Email me and don't say any bad words in the email. It's my school email address and they don't let us say anything bad. That fucken sucks but i'm use to it.
regarding some deleted poem...	RION12 64.136.26.226	19-Feb-05/3:40 PM
I liked the way you compared every thing. Examples: the citys a jungle/her streets burn you just like a fire
Re: Step Up by Blindpoetry	Blindpoetry 68.227.130.156	19-Feb-05/4:07 PM
I was a freakin' tard and wrote a huge reply while not logged in. ...And it didn't register or something. We've eliminated Anonymous comments? Crap. That bites. So I'll say in short: It's sort of random[ish] in the first stanza, but then i come to a point the rest of it. It's about how I am always openly opinionated with my friends, which turns into arguments and debates - which I love. And I encourage them to do so.. just..because.. It's fun for me. XD Nothing really deep. At first it was, but then i was like... Eff the deepness, let me be real.
Re: On the Lawn by bamf909	Dovina 12.72.12.72	19-Feb-05/8:17 PM
Poemranker has been down most of the afternoon and evening. That seems to happen quite often, and in your case explains the lack of initial commentary. Wow, walking out in bare feet on frozen grass just to kiss her. That's great and nicely written. "convalescence" seems strange, try "red and green fuse to one." Welcome aboard.
Re: He tells me to imagine... by RION12	Dovina 12.72.12.72	19-Feb-05/8:22 PM
Said too plainly. Try for imaginative ways to say it.
Re: He tells me to imagine... by RION12	Blindpoetry 68.227.130.156	19-Feb-05/9:00 PM
Kind of blandish. I agree with Dovina on this. metaphors, similies, oxymorons, personification, ect. -they are your friends. ;)
Re: ~RePOST~Cupid's Arrow <----<< by nothingtoanyone	Dovina 12.72.14.78	20-Feb-05/7:01 AM
We all know this is not a Shakespearian style poem. You used a few old English words for some reason, which zodiac picked-up on to ridicule you. It’s what he does – finds some insignificant aspect of your poem to bash, while ignoring the thrust of what you’re trying to communicate. If you are showing us cupid’s sting, as the title suggests, then the arrow has missed its mark, at least to my understanding. Start with getting the spelling and grammar so they say what you mean – “northern” “breathe a breath” “wherefore is the desire thou desirest” After fixing these, look at the things you are saying too many times. “wherefore is the desire thou desirest” could be simply “wherefore is the desire” and “breathe a breath, a breath of blood” could be “breathe a breath of blood.” Then look at your images and metaphors. Does “moss-ridden mule” say what you want to say? I think this has potential for a good poem.