Re: Have You Ever Been In Love? by Katie	Goad 217.95.209.144	23-Jan-05/4:40 PM
no Katie, sadly I've never been in love :( I think probably few people here have ever been in love. Love is quite rare, and you are fortunate indeed to have experienced it. But though we may not experience cloud-walking, moonlight-embracing love itself, we are blessed to have you describe it for us, so that we may experience it vicariously. Perhaps someday I will experience love, before I die. For now I can only solace myself with 10 dollar blowjobs from cheap whores and excessive masturbation, and -- occasionally, delightfully -- a brief second-hand glimpse of love when narrated by blesséd souls such as yourself. P.S. It's been more than an entire fucking year, fix your spelling mistake you mindless bint.
Re: Unwed by gilded in gold	gilded in gold 141.152.251.93	23-Jan-05/5:59 PM
LOL.
Re: Resurrection by Dreammaker1024	Shuushin 70.16.222.243	23-Jan-05/6:05 PM
Intrigued at first by the style. But this has a teen-angst thesaurized feel to it, still. "emitted"? I do like this though: "Weakened by your taste, aroused by the newly formed light has made this midnight a lamp unto the darkened soul within" gotta say.
Re: Early Morning Thought by Dreammaker1024	Shuushin 70.16.222.243	23-Jan-05/6:07 PM
line breaks would really help this.
Re: Unwed by gilded in gold	gilded in gold 141.152.251.93	23-Jan-05/6:44 PM
No Goad, i meant LOL in a good way.
regarding some deleted poem...	patty t 69.158.123.194	23-Jan-05/7:58 PM
alternate title: "How to add melodrama to your local watering hole"
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 70.16.222.243	23-Jan-05/8:46 PM
an abrubt ending, but still some nice tidbits in there. Maybe tone down the punctuation, let the form drive the timing. Good one.
Re: Unwed by gilded in gold	Shuushin 70.16.222.243	23-Jan-05/8:48 PM
nice tone, but too short - it doesn't bring me anywhere or even full circle. and I want it to.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.164	24-Jan-05/5:13 AM
With all its tension, there is something very stable about the image of a turnbuckle. There's a balance and also an importance to the job that is done by the turnbuckle as it holds together two things desperate to fly apart. My poem on the same subject is about a different tool-- the Rack. I love a poem about a babe with a good rack.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.164	24-Jan-05/5:19 AM
Especially as the poems get older.
Re: Reasons by dancin_n_da_moonlite	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.164	24-Jan-05/5:21 AM
Sounds like it could be a Green Day song.
Re: UFO by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.164	24-Jan-05/5:27 AM
Another world invaded another sci-fi x-file for the inhabitants of Titan.
Re: Half a dozen by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Goad 217.95.223.81	24-Jan-05/12:09 PM
She has half a dozen pink roses? What, exactly, does she have one extra of?
Re: Birth by Caducus	Dovina 209.247.222.84	24-Jan-05/3:51 PM
Wow, there's several ways to take this. What man, after knowing the warm squeeze of a woman's womb would desire anything more. Well, being a man you can return.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 209.247.222.84	24-Jan-05/3:58 PM
Somebody told me recently that poetry is a language game. Well this game gives me a lot of tension, like a turnbuckle tightening its ropes. You have an artful, but tensioning, way of bring the most remote scenes into a steel contraption - i.e. verse 3
Re: Feudal Conflict by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 69.236.20.55	24-Jan-05/4:29 PM
Gee Dovina, around L.A. the queens slay as they lay with their own holey men.
Re: Feudal Conflict by Dovina	wilco 24.165.207.93	24-Jan-05/7:07 PM
Is this about chess...or about "the look"? If it's about chess, then I'm bored....if it's about "the look" then I'm scared.
Re: Ode 2 2Pac by PodPoet	Shuushin 70.16.215.111	24-Jan-05/7:07 PM
A nice job with a topic I know nothing about - having said that, I think you ran out of steam at about here: "Why couldn't you have survived And let the dark angels pass you by?" From that point on... I dunno, it looses something. What is there, however, is very strong.
Re: Feudal Conflict by Dovina	Shuushin 70.16.215.111	24-Jan-05/7:10 PM
I think you got word-heavy on this one, D - but I agree, it is a little ominous.
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.165.207.93	24-Jan-05/7:23 PM
I don't know what in the sam hill you're blubbering about here, but I'll give you a nine simply for fuckle.