Re: Better Sex by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.251	15-Dec-04/7:28 AM
You are a good girl and should submit this poem to Junior Scholastic Magazine.
Re: Oh well, shit happens by sir_heff	Dovina 69.175.6.101	14-Dec-04/10:41 AM
How can a friend be un-bias (unbiased)? Do you mean to call her a witch?
Re: Love by RION12	Dovina 69.175.6.101	14-Dec-04/10:43 AM
I wish to thank you for causing me to think about this. Please see my recent post.
Re: Better Sex by Dovina	sir_heff 65.172.117.1	14-Dec-04/10:45 AM
oooh sexy
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.6.101	14-Dec-04/12:56 PM
You're kidding. Of course, you're kidding. Are you kidding? If you're not kidding, pray tell us why.
Re: Forsaken Love by Blue Magpie	Dovina 69.175.6.101	14-Dec-04/4:20 PM
The first three lines introduce a worthy theme, something I wanted to see evolve. But the rest is only music, I'm afraid, good rhythm and rhyme. I enjoy music, but far more when it carries something.
Re: Better Sex by Dovina	JoyLuck 65.60.139.26	15-Dec-04/12:30 AM
This poem has the case of the blue balls. Tell me more. "bra closure" - how sexy...
Re: exercise by JoyLuck	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.7	15-Dec-04/12:33 AM
A poem that passes judgement on itself is a novelty, if not a very good one.
Re: Tiredness by kawakurdi	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.7	15-Dec-04/12:35 AM
Interesting, 'snaps' seems wrong somehow. Do try and cheer up.
Re: Better Sex by Dovina	blacksoul 204.215.33.55	15-Dec-04/2:13 AM
You and your date had more respect than your friend and her boyfriend.
Re: exercise by JoyLuck	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.251	15-Dec-04/7:34 AM
If you lose the last line, it does paint a picture. My roomate's ex girlfriend tried to come on to me during a ski trip in West Virginia. She slept in my hotel room on the other bed. My cell phone has more recent outgoing calls than incoming. My buddy list is filled with people I do not know.
Re: Forsaken Love by Blue Magpie	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.251	15-Dec-04/7:40 AM
It rhymes, huh?
Re: exercise by JoyLuck	Dovina 17.255.240.138	15-Dec-04/10:14 AM
I gave you 7 because of the last line, which I take as mockery. Otherwise 5.
regarding some deleted poem...	leonxic 80.205.204.124	15-Dec-04/11:34 AM
I wonder why nobody ever commented on this.
Re: Dreams of Neverland: Journey to Neverland by TLRufener	RION12 64.136.26.226	15-Dec-04/3:18 PM
This is ok. So you like Peter Pan. That's cool because not alot of people I know like him. So that's great.
Re: Afterwards, when there's just you and the snow and the trees by somemorepoetry	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.61	15-Dec-04/10:45 PM
I actually found this quite interesting and poetic although I have to wonder just exactly where it is supposed to be. I will read it again.
Re: Forsaken Love by Blue Magpie	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.61	15-Dec-04/10:53 PM
I didn't actually mean to delete the comment about communication from Richa, but to reply to it. Yes the poet does have a responsibility to communicate, but that does not mean dumbing everything down to the lowest level, sometimes you have to accept that some readers will not be able to see yet because seeing in this case is dependant on what is already in the reader's mind.
Re: Poems for devolution by richa	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.61	15-Dec-04/11:00 PM
I was once told it was all to do with Dairy farmers, who work 365, although I never really made sense of the reasoning and I agree with Dovina, we would be better off leaving it as it is. Of course to confuse things they also do it in Greece, where there are no real northen climes, or at least not ones that aren't south of the southern climes of the UK and no English style dairy farms.
regarding some deleted poem...	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.61	15-Dec-04/11:02 PM
Of course the poet has a responsibility to communicate, something that is adequately exemplified in this piece.
Re: A friend told me by RION12	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.61	15-Dec-04/11:04 PM
I think it needs a little more work before it can be called truly poetic.