regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.6.101	16-Dec-04/1:29 PM
Funny. The title doesn't help, maybe "Discovery" or "Tubfull" or "Midnight Visitor"
Re: Reality by blacksoul	Stacy Stewart 209.23.12.28	16-Dec-04/1:58 PM
what in god's name is this? Not a Haiku!
regarding some deleted poem...	Bobjim 195.93.33.11	16-Dec-04/12:51 PM
A problem we all have to face. Except for me as I intend never to work.
Re: Love-A=? by sir_heff	New Life Drug 69.107.26.171	16-Dec-04/5:22 PM
whoa. love square. that sucks.
Re: Better Sex by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.14.17	16-Dec-04/5:36 AM
The best part is "but something at trouser level seemed to make him joyful." -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	sir_heff 65.172.117.1	16-Dec-04/8:34 AM
omg that is funny shit -10-
Re: Forsaken Love by Blue Magpie	sir_heff 65.172.117.1	16-Dec-04/8:55 AM
i like it -8- cause it was semi-confusing, but i like the message
Re: Afterwards, when there's just you and the snow and the trees by somemorepoetry	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.12	16-Dec-04/12:19 AM
Well I have read it a few more times and I still like it. So here a e few comments. There is an 'r' missing of their in "Thie energy for the Spring " this stanza is the one I get least from incidentally. Possibly a hypen between cold and hard in "the cold, hard ground". Maybe a comma after dropped, in "where you dropped boots and all," then just after that commas after home, and soil.
regarding some deleted poem...	blacksoul 204.215.33.59	16-Dec-04/3:05 AM
I like it Lydia write what you feel -10-
Re: Some Poem by jauser	sir_heff 65.172.117.1	16-Dec-04/9:02 AM
haha what a shitty poem -9- i'll give you 10-(what its worth)
Re: Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	sir_heff 65.172.117.1	16-Dec-04/9:06 AM
sometimes you just gotta scrach -8-
Re: Jesus by Dovina	sir_heff 65.172.117.1	16-Dec-04/9:21 AM
such truth. gave you a 9 since the damn jews killed him
Re: A Better God by Dovina	sir_heff 65.172.117.1	16-Dec-04/9:27 AM
thats why god has to be a man, he's just to lazy to care
Re: Many Thanks by Dovina	sir_heff 65.172.117.1	16-Dec-04/9:35 AM
i think "write" in the 2nd to last stanza should be wrote, but then again mabye i'm just reading it from the wrong angle
Re: A Stitch In Time by Dovina	sir_heff 65.172.117.1	16-Dec-04/9:41 AM
i like it! -10-
Re: Fugitively Speaking by Dovina	sir_heff 65.172.117.1	16-Dec-04/9:47 AM
i find that sometimes it is very counter-productive to think. well for me thats true almost all the time...-9-
Re: Reality by blacksoul	Bobjim 195.93.33.11	16-Dec-04/12:55 PM
How unoriginal. I love it. 10
Re: A smile by Bobjim	nentwined 64.60.192.130	16-Dec-04/1:12 PM
It's a thing that you do with your face, when both corners of your mouth are upturned and the middle of your mouth is relatively relaxed. Sort of. Maybe.
Re: Reality by blacksoul	Dovina 69.175.6.101	16-Dec-04/1:15 PM
The rules of Haiku are precise, and this is not Haiku. Please call it Free Verse. It sounds like an opening statement in need of support or illustration, and capitalization of "Him." Often, when I comment on a religious poem, people think I am putting down the religion, but in this case I am not, only the way it's presented.
Re: A smile by Bobjim	Stacy Stewart 209.23.12.28	16-Dec-04/1:15 PM
Reminds me of a poem I wrote in the second grade... It has no imagination once so ever.